# Need Correction. Paragraph

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Hi teachers,

I wrote the new paragraph. This is just a paragraph from a reading. Could you correct it, please? Suggestions are more than welcome.

Old one:

At the same time Mrs. Anderson is coming into the kitchen with today's mail in her hand. There aren't many letters this morning; there are only two letters, one letter for Mrs. Anderson and one letter for Robert. Robert’s letter is from his parents, Dr. Wilson and Mrs. Wilson. They live with their daughter Caroline in Wilton; about one hour by train from Bridgeport.

New one:

At the same time Mrs. Anderson is coming into the kitchen with today's newspaper in her hand. Robert is looking at his mail in his laptop. There aren't many mails this morning; there are only two mails, one is a trash mail and the other mail is from his parents, Dr. Wilson and Mrs. Wilson. They live with their daughter Caroline in Wilton; about one hour by train from Bridgeport.

Next Saturday it's Caroline’s sixteen birthday, therefore Robert must go to his parents' house in Wilton this weekend for the party.

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At the same time Mrs. Anderson is coming into the kitchen with today's newspaper in her hand. Robert is looking at his mail on his laptop. There was not that much mail this morning. There are only two emails, one was in the trash and the other one is from his parents, Dr. Wilson and Mrs. Wilson. They live with their daughter Caroline in Wilton, about one hour by train from Bridgeport.

Next Saturday is Caroline’s sixteen birthday, therefore Robert must go to his parents' house in Wilton this weekend for the party.
Hi Key1,

Thank you very much for your reply.

Two question:

a) There was not that much mail this morning.

Can I say, 'There is no much ...? because the students don't know the past of to be yet.

b) ... one was in the trash and ...

What I want to express here is that he has two emails one is a trash mail and the other one is from his parents.

By the way, 'mail' is an uncountable noun?

Thank you

TS
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Is this paragraph correct?

At the same time Mrs. Anderson is coming into the kitchen with today's newspaper in her hand. Robert is looking at his mail on his laptop. There is not much mail this morning. There are only two emails, one is junk mail and the other one is from his parents, Dr. Wilson and Mrs. Wilson. They live with their daughter Caroline in Wilton, about one hour by train from Bridgeport.

Next Saturday is Caroline’s sixteen birthday, therefore Robert must go to his parents' house in Wilton this weekend for the party.

Mail is uncountable when it's referring to the system, is that so?

The phrase, "At the same time," sounds like it is a literary device that is integral to the original text and therefore it should not be transferred to the rewritten story, in my opinion. This is how I personally would edit your rewrite:

Mrs. Anderson is coming into the kitchen with today's newspaper in her hand. Robert is sitting in the kitchen looking at his email on his laptop. There are only two emails, one is spam and the other is from his parents, Dr. and Mrs. Wilson. They live with their daughter Caroline in Wilton, about one hour by train from Bridgeport.

This Saturday is Caroline's sixteenth birthday; therefore Robert must go to his parent's house in Wilton this weekend for the party.
Hi Anonymous,

Thank you very much for your reply and the advice.

By the way, 'mail' is uncountable when it's referring to the system, is that so?

TS
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The word "mail" is uncountable. However, the word "email" can be countable or uncountable.

You've got mail (it could be one letter or many letters - there is no such word as "mails").

You've got email (it could be one email or many emails).

You've got 10 emails that you haven't opened yet.

I've got emails coming out of my ears.
Hi anonymous,

I didn't know the word 'mails' doesn't exist. So, when people talk about 'mails' in fact they refer to 'emails'. That's something new to me.

However, the word "email" can be countable or uncountable.

Could you give me an example where 'email' is uncountable, please?

Thank YOU

TS
Thinking Spainan example where 'email' is uncountable, please?
I didn't have a lot of email in my inbox this morning.

Cf. I don't have a lot of furniture in my living room. / I don't have a lot of milk in the refrigerator.

CJ
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