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Hi Teachers,

Could you correct this paragraph if necessary?

This is a department store. It opened at nine o’clock and closed at five thirty. It is six o’clock now. The department store closed half an hour ago. So, all the shoppers have already left the store. They left it half an hour ago. The sales people have counted their money, have given it to the sales managers, and have gone home. The last one left fifteen minutes ago. That was at five forty-five.

Thanks in advance
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I would have written So all the shoppers ... without the comma, which is the usual way of punctuating with introductory so. Some would argue that this is just a fragment which has to be attached to the previous sentence, thus:

... closed half an hour ago, so all the shoppers have ...

Otherwise, it looks all right. Emotion: smile

CJ
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Hi Teachers,

If I've already asked about this one, please forgive me. I don't really remember if I did it.

Thank you
Early onset Alzheimer's? Emotion: smile

CJ
Hi Jim,

Thank you so much for you reply and help. I thought you were angry with me. Then, because of Cool Breeze, I realized that sometimes my questions are really dumb.Emotion: embarrassed

Best,

TS
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Hi Jim,

Very funny. Is it experience who is talking? Emotion: it wasnt me
Thinking SpainIs it experience who is talking?
You guessed it!

CJ
Hi Jim,

That makes two of us then!Emotion: rofl

Best,

TS
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