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Hi everybody,

I am a new member of that forum, you are great! I need a one favour please. I wrote a text script for speaker of video tour for my website and I need your comment. I am now very good in English so please check it and tell me if anything is not OK:

"Hi,

This is Nick, welcome to [name of website]. Let's go to the tour!

[name of website] is about living places, people from those places and their habbits.

You can discover most famous places like Paris, Rome, Rio de Janeiro and so on or idyllic places for which you have never heard before.

The most important is that you can find somebody from place you want to visit. That person lives there so he or she must know everything about that place.

And not just that! You can also find a free hosting, company or guide.

[name of website] gives you all information you need about the place. And if any information you need is not posted yet, you can just simple send automatic request to all members from that place.

Even if you don't planning to travel you can use [name of website] to show to the world where you live, to share photos, videos, updates and other stuff.

All members have together with their profiles also their living place card. Everybody from the same place can edit that place, adding new sections with text, photos or videos.

It is fully secured network system. System calculate people credibility score which makes sure only credible members can contact other credible members.

So it is Usefull, funny and also highly secured.

Ready to start? [name of portal]!"

Thank you!! Emotion: smile
Ernest

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Hi, and welcome to the forums.

You can discover most famous places like Paris, Rome, Rio de Janeiro and so on or idyllic places for which you have never heard of before.

The most important is that you can find somebody from the place that you want to visit.

That person lives there so he or she must know (everything about that place)(a lot about the place).

You can also find a free hosting, company or guide. - I'm not sure what you mean by this.

[name of website] gives you all the information you need about the place.

And if any information you need is not posted yet, you can just simply send an automatic request to all our members from that place.

Even if you don't planning to travel you can use [name of website] to show to the world where you live, to share photos, videos, updates and other stuff.

All members have, together with their profiles, also their living place card. Everybody from the same place can edit that place, adding new sections with text, photos or videos.

It is a fully secured network system. The system calculates peoples' credibility score which makes sure only credible members can contact other credible members.

So it is Usefull, funny and also highly secured.

Ready to start? [name of portal]!"
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optilang thanks a lot for that!