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Hello, I'm newbie here and I'm having problems completing my paper.So,I would like to ask any of you that can help me check this sentences.What do you think about this sentences:
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Urban systems nowadays explicitly are becoming huge and increasingly complex as urban economies, social and political structures and norms, transportation and other infrastructure systems and technologies keep evolve. It is a three-dimensional (3D) representative to visualize the urban area and becoming an important tool for urban planners or architects in order to propose design and development of the city. While the tools for visualize the urban simulation and technology are growing at rapid phase, it’s become useful to speed the process of development. Hence, with urban simulation, we can reduced design flaws, grasp the concepts better and understood sooner, and the best things are, development budget can be targeted earlier with the help of this 3D visualization tool before construction phase.

Real time simulation bring the product which is urban simulation in effective way closer to both the designer and the client to completely understand a building very well before construction of the building takes place. Despite the fact that many companies use 3D visualization technology as their interactive presentation tool, urban simulation clearly gives a better idea to envision all phases of an architectural project from earlier design to the last phase of construction and preservation. So, it is very important for us to have a simulation that represented a city that can be used as a tool for urban planning for future development, computer games, and many more. Furthermore, urban simulation has a lot of beneficial to the researchers especially in term of producing a good 3D simulation for user to be able to feel how the city looks from different perspectives.

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I need help for grammar and sentences structure.

p/s - sorry, I'm still studying and improving my english.
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Hello, welcome to the forum. No need to say sorry - that's what we are here for Emotion: smile

You have quite a few problems but nothing major and you are certainly understandable, so you are getting there!

I'd say your main problems are

verb tenses - for example 'technologies keep evolve' should be 'keep evolving'.

confusing nouns with adjectives - for example 'a lot of beneficial' should be 'a lot of benefit'.

I've underlined these and other problematic areas. Some of your phrasing is clumsy and other areas are incorrect. I'm also not sure if you are discussing a specific software or this type of software in general - you may need to phrase things differently accordingly.

Urban systems nowadays explicitly are becoming huge and increasingly complex as urban economies, social and political structures and norms, transportation and other infrastructure systems and technologies keep evolve. It is a three-dimensional (3D) representative to visualize the urban area and (is) becoming an important tool for urban planners or architects in order to propose design and development of the city. While the tools for visualize the urban simulation and technology are growing at rapid phase, it’s (don't use contractions in formal writing) become useful to speed the process of development. Hence, with urban simulation, we can reduced design flaws, grasp the concepts better and understood sooner, and the best things are, development budget can be targeted earlier with the help of this 3D visualization tool before construction phase.

Real time simulation bring the product which is urban simulation in effective way closer to both the designer and the client to completely understand a building very well before construction of the building takes place. Despite the fact that many companies use 3D visualization technology as their interactive presentation tool, urban simulation clearly gives a better idea to envision all phases of an architectural project from earlier design to the last phase of construction and preservation. So, it is very important for us to have a simulation that represented a city that can be used as a tool for urban planning for future development, computer games, and many more. Furthermore, urban simulation has a lot of beneficial to the researchers especially in term of producing a good 3D simulation for user to be able to feel how the city looks from different perspectives.
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I agree with Nona. Your sentence structure needs much improvements. I think part of the problem is that you intend to create a sophsiticated tone using big words in your writing but not quite mastering the skills as yet. As a result, your writing was entangled with wrong usage and ended up in confusing contexts.

As already indicated by Nona, your essay appeared to me as well a messy and bewildering description of an “urban environment” which lead the readers to wonder what the essence of your essay really was. I am not sure it’s your style but there is quite a bit of “abstractivism” in your writing. Good writing should paint a vivid picture of what the author tries to convey in words. To improve, first we have to learn how to clearly state something without having the reader to guess, and then improve on the choice of words and sentence sturcture. That’s my opinion.
Thanks for the comment.I think I'd better start learning how to produce nice sentence structure.I'd already done some corrections and with the help from both of you and of course; my supervisor (He corrected my 1st page of my paper for 3 hours!!).