Hi all...First of all i wanna thanks to every1 who read this post and try to help me...Now this summer i would like to go Usa for a training program.I work with a company in my country for this program and they told me that i ve to write a employe application letter which will send to the company in Usa to find me a training job...Anyway so they gave me a cover letter but i found that very simple so i d like to write a more impressive one....Therefore i m looking your helps.....

This program is a tourism training program... And i need to tell that my benefits on that way which i gained since 8 years education and working experiences.... And i ve to tell them that i was a university student which was about Tourism management but i droped down ther education in 3 rd years for gaining more experience as a working.... Thats the point but donno how can i write that in a formal way...And also i ve to tell them i will continiou the education later i did not stop the education just took a break for getting more experience in business life more than the books... (i hope i can tell ya what i mean exatly) ....i have to tell them my experiences in the tourism life and have to point my expectations by this training program but cant do that coz of my suking english .. Emotion: big smile Hopefully some1 can help me in this way...Greatful for all helps.... Thanks
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Any1 can help me about this letter pls?
Hi,

Try to write a draft, and then post it here for comments and suggestions.

Start by saying what you would say if you were talking to the person face to face.

Best wishes, Clive
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Thanks a lot for kind reply... While i m beginnig to write this post i was not sure that what i m going to write. So i thought other people may do that for me Emotion: big smile thats why i did not put any draft here... But i think it will be so egoistly. Emotion: big smile so i put the draft which i m thinking to send to the company... Anyway all helps are appriciated by my heart... Please fell free to make a comment and correction Emotion: big smile

Dear Employer;
I am writing to apply to work in your business for which I consider my skills would sufficient and appropriate. I am from Turkey and i graduated of Ankara Anatolian Hotel and Tourism Vocational High School which is one of the best tourism vocational high school in Turkey.After the high school education i started to universty which was Tourism and Hospitalty Management in Balıkesir University in Turkey.In the third year of the universty i postpone my education for further time because to gain more practical experience in business life which will help me in the universty education also.While i m working in the tourism sector i realised that the 8 years theoretical knowledge which i gained in the schools was ehoughly good for me and i need to get more practical experience in the business life.So i droped down my universty education for gaining more practice in tourism.Later i wanted to go to school back again but at the present i believe that i need to improve myself in bussiness life more than the theoretical education.(i m not sure how to describe this situation simple and the shorter form so i ve to describe the same thing many times to tell it clearly :/ )I am able to work in USA on J1 or Q visa for 12 months under the title of tourism intern on a paid basis. I will have all legal documents and a social security number through the sponsorship of Ozman International Education Services, recognised by The State Department of the USA Government.I can be available within a month as soon as I am admitted to the job position.

I consider this is a great opportunity for me, and I hope, you would also consider this is an opportunity to provide an international, professional and wonderful experience in American business life and also cultural exchange. During my education at the high school and the university, I was able to acquire a general idea about management and business life. I majored in Tourism and Hospitality Management. Furthermore, internships that I have enhanced my professional know ledges.As I was involved more and more into business life, I realised that I had to obtain more practical knowledge in hotel management. By the internships, I improved the skills of problem solving, coping with problems and human relations. The internships enabled me to broaden my perspectives and develop my existing skills because I had the opportunity to meet and interact with various people and observe different environments of business life.

Besides these, I ve to point this, i always love and enjoyed to work in tourism and wanted have a carrier in tourism sector so that i reason i shaped my life and i got my education on that way.Also had chance to work in most of the best hospitalty companies which are international ones.Working and traning in those companies let me to see the international companies hotel and management systems and their visions and also i experienced working with the people from other countries.So i believed that this experience let met o improve my English and my vision through the other culture and people.Therefore, that was a great experience for me and that great experience enhanced my self-confidence.
I am very enthusiastic and ambitious; I will be an efficient member of your team, provided you decide to employ me.I would be happy to receive a call for an interview.

Sincerely,

XXXXX
Hey every1 and Clive pls can you check the draft and help me? i m waiting to hear your comments....
Hi,

I think you need to attach a copy of your resume to this letter.

A lot of what you have written here seems to me to be very general in nature, and certainly quite repetitive.. Can you replace some of the general stuff with more specific examples/details?

In addition, do you perhaps need to say what benefit you will bring to the company if they give you this position?

Best wishes, Clive

Dear Employer;

I am writing to apply for a position in your business as a tourism intern.

I am from Turkey and I graduated fromthe Ankara Anatolian Hotel and Tourism Vocational High School, which is one of the best such institutions in Turkey. I began ana degree in Tourism and Hospitalty Management in Balıkesir University, but in the third year I postpone my education for a time in order to gain more practical experience in business. I felt that this would help me in my later university education. While I was working in the tourism sector, I realised that the 8 years ' theoretical knowledge which I had already gained was sufficient, and that I still needed to get more practical experience.

I am able to work in the USA on a J1 or Q visa for 12 months as a tourism intern, on a paid basis. I have all legal documents and a social security number through the sponsorship of Ozman International Education Services, recognised by The State Department of the USA Government. I can be available within a month, as soon as I am admitted to the job position.

I consider this is a great opportunity for me to gain an international, professional and wonderful experience in American business life, and also to benefit from a cultural exchange. During my education, I was able to acquire general ideas about management and business life. Furthermore, other internships have enhanced my professional knowledge. (How many internships can you expect to be given?) They have improved my skills in problem solving and human relations. They have also enabled me to broaden my perspectives and develop my existing skills, because I had the opportunity to meet and interact with various people and observe different business environments..

I have always loved working in tourism and want to have a career in the tourism sector. I have also had the opportunity to work in most of the best international hospitalty companies and to see their hotel and management systems sas well as their visions. I also experienced working with people from other countries. I think you should give details of all this.

I am very enthusiastic and ambitious, I will be an efficient member of your team, provided you decide to employ me. I would be happy to receive a call for an interview.

Sincerely,

***
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Thanks lot Dear Clive for your great helps and informations... So i shaped up the letter through your comments.. I hope its better now but still needed badly your comments till i found the perfect one Emotion: big smile So here is my cover letter on the last stage ... Please make me know where i made a mistake and failed centences...

Dear Employer;

I am writing to apply for a position in your business as a tourism intern.

I am from Turkey and I graduated from the Ankara Anatolian Hotel and Tourism Vocational High School, which is one of the best such institutions in Turkey. I began ana degree in Tourism and Hospitalty Management in Balıkesir University, but in the third year I postpone my education for a time in order to gain more practical experience in business. I felt that this would help me in my later university education also. While I am working in the tourism sector, I realised that the 8 years ' theoretical knowledge which I had already gained was sufficient, and that I still needed to get more practical experience.So that reason, I try to gain more practical experience in the sector which is part of my life and planning to make a career on it.(i mean the tourism) (and i try to show that tourism is my lifesytle and my carrer aims. )Especially i want to work in other countries to practice thier tourism systems and their visions through the Tourism...

I am currently working in C-K Farabi Hotel Ankara as Reseption Clerk. I believe that I have the skills and qualities that you are looking for. I am outgoing and open-minded with required experience of relating to customers with hospitality, patience, respect and consideration.My current position as Front Desk Clerk requires initiative and self - confidence, as well as ability to communicate effectively with people at all levels,and in addition to these particular qualities I have, I am a reliable and hardworking person who is always willing to learn more, and I fully commit to the tasks I am given. I love working in a team,this is a very important point for me,I strongly believe that a good team would be the key to success of any business,I have to indicate it once more,I am a very succesful and proper team player,which is crucial especially in hospitality,and I am always willing to contribute.

I consider this is a great opportunity for me to gain an international, professional and wonderful experience in American business life, and also to benefit from a cultural exchange. During my education, I was able to acquire general ideas about management and business life. Furthermore, other internships and my business experiences which i pointed on my enclosed resume, have enhanced my professional knowledge.They have improved my skills in problem solving and human relations. They have also enabled me to broaden my perspectives and develop my existing skills, because I had the opportunity to meet and interact with various people and observe different business environments..

I am able to work in the USA on a J1 or Q visa for 12 months as a tourism intern, on a paid basis. I have all legal documents and a social security number through the sponsorship of Ozman International Education Services, recognised by The State Department of the USA Government. I can be available within a month, as soon as I am admitted to the job position.
I am very enthusiastic and ambitious, I will be an efficient member of your team, provided you decide to employ me. I would be happy to receive a call for an interview.

Sincerely,

***
Hi,

Dear Employer;

I am writing to apply for a position in your business as a tourism intern.

I am from Turkey and I graduated from the Ankara Anatolian Hotel and Tourism Vocational High School, which is one of the best such institutions in Turkey. I began a degree in Tourism and Hospitalty Management in Balıkesir University, but in the third year I postponed my education for a time in order to gain more practical experience in business. I felt that this would help me in my later university education. While I was working in the tourism sector, I realised that the 8 years of theoretical knowledge which I had already gained was sufficient, and that I still needed to get more practical experience. I especially want to work in other countries to learn about their tourism systems and visions.

I am currently working in the C-K Farabi Hotel, Ankara, as a Reception Clerk. I believe that I have the skills and qualities that you are looking for. I am outgoing and open-minded, with experience of relating to customers with hospitality, patience, respect and consideration. My current position as Front Desk Clerk requires initiative and self-confidence, as well as the ability to communicate effectively with people at all levels. In addition to having these particular qualities, I am a reliable and hardworking person who is always willing to learn more, and I fully commit to the tasks I am given. I love working in a team. This is a very important point for me, because I strongly believe that a good team is the key to success for any business. I have to indicate this once more. I am a very successful team player, which is a crucial point, especially in hospitality.

I consider this is a great opportunity for me to gain an international, professional and wonderful experience in American business life, and also to benefit from a cultural exchange. During my education, I was able to acquire general ideas about management and business life. Furthermore, other internships and my business experiences have enhanced my professional knowledge.They have improved my skills in problem solving and human relations. They have also enabled me to broaden my perspectives and develop my existing skills, because I had the opportunity to meet and interact with various people and observe different business environments..

I am able to work in the USA on a J1 or Q visa for 12 months as a tourism intern, on a paid basis. I have all the necessary legal documents and a social security number through the sponsorship of Ozman International Education Services, recognised by The State Department of the US government. I can be available within a month, as soon as I am accepted in the job position.

I am very enthusiastic and ambitious. I will be an efficient member of your team, if you decide to employ me. I m enclosing my resume, and I would be happy and grateful to receive a call for an interview.

Best wishes and good luck with this, Clive



Thanks loooooooooooot clive. I dont know how i m going to thanks to you.... I m seriously appriciated your helps.. I fell this letter is done for me ... But i have just one question in my mind and thats you did not make any comment with the last form.. So i believe that its ok for you by this form... Just wanted to ask If its ok? or not i mean if you were a tourism job giver would you give me a job with this cover letter:D Anyway i dont wanna waste your time anymore with me... But if you leave a comment with this letter i fell better and i will sent it to the company... Thanks lot ...
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