Hi all,

can somebody help me and proofread my presentation letter, please? The deadline is Thursday, 29th january..thank you so much in advance! You are my Salvation..:-)

Here is what I have:

Milan, January, 26th 2009

Dear Sirs,

I would like to apply for the XXX International Exchange program. I am currently undertaking the Management course at the XXX University in Milan, Italy.

I am really interested in this opportunity to be in contact with an international network of prestigious schools and corporate partners as well as the alumni association that comes with the XXX master in international management.

This international experience is the ideal prosecution of the educational path I have followed during these last years of academic and business education. During this period, I undertook an exchange program at the XXX University in Paris, which has been followed by an internship in a marketing and communication firm based in New York City. These two key experiences are part of my undergraduate education in International Trade.

I look at an international academic education as the way to enter in contact with the leading global business environment and international contexts. In this frame, the XXX Master represents the ideal way to learn how the business excellence is achieved in highly competitive contexts. Moreover, I am really interested in the internship period and in the Business Project, as they represent a great possibility to deepen the knowledge of a specific business context and best practices from a privileged point of view. I am hardworking, responsible and reliable.

Together with the application letter, I enclose my full resume as stated in your requirement.

Thank you for your consideration, I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

(firma)
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I would like to apply for the *** International Exchange program. I am currently undertaking [enrolled in (or participating in)] the Management course at the *** University in Milan, Italy.

I am really[very] interested in this opportunity to be in contact [involved] with an international network of prestigious schools and corporate partners as well as the alumni association that comes[that is affiliated] with the *** Master in International Management.

This international experience is the ideal prosecution of [progression along] the educational path I have followed[chosen] during these last years[my _ years] of academic and business education. During this period, I undertook [participated in] an exchange program at the *** University in Paris, which has been[was] followed by an internship in a marketing and communication firm based in New York City. These two key experiences are part [have been valuable aspects] of my undergraduate education in International Trade.

I look at [view] an international academic education as the [best] way to enter in contact [become involved] with the leading global business environment and international contexts. In this frame, [delete] The *** Master represents the ideal way to learn how the[delete] business excellence is achieved in highly competitive contexts. Moreover, I am really [extremely] interested in the internship period and in the Business Project, as they represent a [offer the] great possibility [opportunity] to deepen the knowledge of a specific business context and best practices from a privileged point of view. I am hardworking, responsible and reliable.

Together with the application letter, I enclose my full resume as stated in your requirement.

Thank you for your consideration, I look forward to hearing from you soon [your response].

Hello,
I actually did more editing than proofreading - your spelling and grammar were generally fine. I highlighted in red the words or phrases I suggest you change and highlighted my suggested changes in yellow.
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Hi! Thank you so much for your advices!

Unfortunately I can't read your email....send me a private message, I'll be happy to help you.

What do you suggest to change in the beginning of the 4th paragraph (I look at an international...) ?

Thank you again,

I'm waiting for your PM,

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