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Hey guys,
Would someone please be able to rephrase the last part of this sentence? I've left the rest of the sentence there so you can see in what context it's in.

"I studied Photography at GCSE, which is where I discovered Photoshop. This opened up a whole new area for me and was my introduction to the world of design, my laptop then becoming my digital playground."

The last bit just doesn't sound right, and need your expert help! Maybe use another word instead of 'then'? I'm not sure.

Thanks,
Stef
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Hi,

Would someone please be able to rephrase the last part of this sentence? I've left the rest of the sentence there so you can see in what context it's in.

"I studied Photography at GCSE, which is where I discovered Photoshop. This opened up a whole new area for me and was my introduction to the world of design, my laptop then becoming my digital playground."

The last bit just doesn't sound right, and need your expert help! Maybe use another word instead of 'then'? I'm not sure.

YOu could just omit the word 'then'. Or you could make a separate sentence,

eg My laptop became my digital playground."

Best wishes, Clive
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Hi,

although the previous advice seems absolutely fine to me, you could also say, in the same sentence, ' ...was my introduction to the world of design(,) and my laptop quickly became my digital playground.'

Hope I've been of help

Ed
Hi,

I'd prefer to avoid a second 'and' in the sentence.Emotion: smile

Clive
Cool - thanks for the help guys!
I'm still open for any more suggestions, but for now, I think i'll go for just removing the word 'then' completely.
Stef
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