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The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017.

Attendances at emergency care departments per 1000-population

The given bar chart provides data about the age profile of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017.

As can be seen clearly that the attendances were absolutely dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers saw an accordingly upward trend in both two years in question.

In terms of the 75 and over age bracket, the figures started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population. This was followed by a marginal increase to just under 70 in the year 2017, leading to the highest point of attendances during the whole period. Meanwhile, the number of the 65 to 74 year-olds rose to around 32, which is nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75 and over year-old people.

If we look at the details, the second greatest number belonged to those children who aged under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in two separate years. By contrast, the 5-15 age range was named as the lowest rate, standing at just above 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 and 2 per cent respectively.

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The given bar chart provides data about the age profile (wrong form) of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017.

As can be seen clearly that The attendances were absolutely dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers saw an accordingly upward trend in both of the two years in question.

In terms of the 75-and-over age bracket, the figures started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population. This was followed by a marginal increase to just under 70 in the year 2017, leading to the highest point (wrong word) of attendances during the whole period. Meanwhile, the number of the 65 to 74 year-olds rose to around 32, which is nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75 and over year-old people.

If we look at the details, The second greatest largest number belonged to those children who were aged under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in the two separate years. By contrast, the 5-15 age range was named as the lowest rate, standing at just above 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and those aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 and 2 per cent (How did you calculate those percentage values?) respectively.

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The given bar chart provides data about the age profile of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017.

As can be seen clearly that the attendances were dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers also saw an upward trend in both of the two years.

Looking at the details, the figures for the 75-and-over age bracket started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population in 2016. There was then a marginal increase to just under 70 the following year, leading to the highest of attendances during the whole period. The second largest number belonged to those children who were under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in the two separate years.

Meanwhile, the number of the 65-74 year-olds rose to around 32, which was nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75-and-over-year-old people. The 5-15 age range constituted the lowest rate, standing at just over 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and those aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 person and 2 persons respectively.

The given bar chart provides data about the age profile of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017. (You did not fix these mistakes.)

As can be seen clearly that (Do not write opinions or conclusions in Task 1. Just describe the data, not how you see it.) The attendances were dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers also saw an upward trend in both of the two years.

Looking at the details, the figures for the 75-and-over age bracket started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population in 2016. There was then a marginal increase to just under 70 the following year, leading to the highest of attendances during the whole period. The second largest number belonged to those children who were under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in the two separate years.

Meanwhile, the number of the 65-74 year-olds rose to around 32, which was nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75-and-over-year-old people. The 5-15 age range constituted the lowest rate, standing at just over 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and those aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 person and 2 persons respectively.

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The bar chart provides data about six age categories of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017.

It is clearly that the attendances were dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers also saw an upward trend in both of the two years.

Looking at the details, the figures for the 75-and-over age bracket started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population in 2016. There was then a marginal increase to just under 70 the following year, leading to the highest attendance during the whole period. The second largest number belonged to those children who were under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in the two separate years.

Meanwhile, the number of the 65-74 year-olds rose to around 32, which was nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75-and-over year-old people. The 5-15 age range constituted the lowest number, standing at just over 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and those aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 person and 2 persons respectively.

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An Nguyễn Ngọc- Why the word "given" is left out?

Because "given table" is an unnatural expression. "Given" is rarely used before a noun. It normally comes after a noun. The reader knows what table or chart or map you are writing about.

An Nguyễn Ngọc How i can can I correct the word "75-and-over-year-old"?

the 75-and-over-year-old people (unnatural) = people 75 and older / people older than 74.


The bar chart provides data about six age categories of patients at hospital emergency departments in Northern Ireland in December of 2016 and 2017. The units of measure are number of attendances per 1000 population. The values in the table range from a low of about 20 to a high of about 70.

It is clearly that The attendances were dominated by the oldest and the youngest age groups. Patient numbers also increased saw an upward trend in both of the two years. (We cannot see a trend in two data points. Trend lines are seen on line graphs when there is an increase or decrease consistently over many time points.)

Looking at the details, The figures for the 75-and-over age bracket started at roughly 65 people per 1000-population in 2016. There was then a marginal increase to just under 70 the following year, leading to which represented the highest attendance of all age groups. during the whole period. The second largest number belonged to those children who were under 5 years old, with the figures rising slightly from 50 to approximately 52 in the two separate years.

Meanwhile, the number of the 65-74 year-olds rose from about 30 in 2016 to around 32 the following year, which was nearly half of the corresponding figure for the 75-and-over year-old people 75 and over . The 5-15 age range constituted the lowest number, standing at just over 20 out of 1000. A slight rise was also seen in the number of patients aged 16 to 44 and those aged 45 to 64, by close to 1 person and 2 persons respectively.

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The following illustration describes the attendance (per 1000 – population) at hospital emergency department in Northern Ireland of different age groups from December 2016 to December 2017. The chart confirms that there is an increase in the attendance across all the age groups from December 2016 to December 2017.

Clearly, it can be deduced that majority of such attendees belongs to elderly group followed by infants and children who contributes most of the critical cases. This could be because; such age groups are highly prone to their surrounding environment and comprise much lesser immunity when compared with other age groups.

It can also be concluded that children and teenagers aged between 5 and 15, are the fittest with as low attendance as 21-23 per 1000 population followed by the adults ageing from 45 to 64. But otherwise, it is also to note that the Y-generation (millennial) is susceptible to the surroundings with as many cases as senior citizens (ageing between 65 and 74).


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