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Hi,

Can you, please, tell me what are the mistakes I made in the following text, especially about the use of the tenses and the use of the adverbs:

"I was walking in the street, I saw a man before me, he was very tall but thin.
After I met two children, a boy and a girl.
The girl was short and the boy was tall for someone of his age, he looked like a teenager.
After, I saw my neighbour, she is a fat woman, her husband is a man incredibly thin, they have opposite appearances.
A little later, I saw myself in a showcase, I am an ordinary man with a medium physical appearence".

Thank you very much for your correction. If you need help for French, don't hesitate to send me a message.
Have a good day.
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Hi,

Can you, please, tell me what are the mistakes I made in the following text, especially about the use of the tenses and the use of the adverbs:

"I was walking in the street, I saw a man before me, he was very tall but thin.
After I met two children, a boy and a girl.
The girl was short and the boy was tall for someone of his age, he looked like a teenager.
After, I saw my neighbour, she is a fat woman, her husband is a man incredibly thin, they have opposite appearances.
A little later, I saw myself in a showcase, I am an ordinary man with a medium physical appearence".

Here is a corrected text. Ask about any edits you don't understand, OK?

You cannot simply join sentences by using commas.

You need to study the difference between 'after' and 'afterwards'.

I was walking in the street. I saw a man before me. He was very tall but thin.
Afterwards, I met two children, a boy and a girl. The girl was short and the boy was tall for someone of his age. He looked like a teenager. Afterwards, I saw my neighbour. She is a fat woman. Her husband is a man incredibly thin. They have opposite appearances.
A little later, I saw myself in a showcase. (What do you mean by 'a showcase'?) I am an ordinary man with a medium physical appearance.

Clive
Thank you Clive.

By "showcase", I mean "shop window".
I don't understand the difference between "after" and "afterwards"
See you.
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Hi,

'Afterwards' is a very, very common word, and is often not known by learners of English.
Let me illustrate with simple examples.

Context
6pm I phoned Tom.
7pm I cooked dinner

I can say
After I phoned Tom, I cooked dinner.
or
I phoned Tom. Afterwards, I cooked dinner.

Would you like to try to write a few sentences with after and afterwards?

Clive
Thank you for your reply.

I try to make a few sentences:

1) I got up. Afterwards, I had my breakfast(After I got up, I had my breakfast).

2) I worked all day long. Afterwards, I came back home(After I worked all day long, I came back home).

3) I filled the tank of my car. Afterwards, I drove to London(After I filled the tank of my car, I drove to London).

Here they are.
I hope I understood well.
See you.
Hi,

All correct. You're a fast learner.Emotion: smile

Clive
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Thank you clive.

Is it better to say : "After I filled the tank of my car, I drove to London." or
"After I had filled the tank of my car, I drove to London." ?

Have a good day.
Hi,

Both are
OK. When the sequence of events is clear (eg when you say 'after'), the Past Perfect is often not used.

Clive
Thank you again.

Serge
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