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I think these sentences still have a lot of room for improvement.
Can you help me check them. Tell me how to correct them.
I would appreciate your help.
Thank you very much.

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It is after breaking the record of most hits in a single season that Ichiro Suzuki has become an Asian hero.

I think it is his tip that helps me surmount many difficulties in my life
What Ichiro Suzuki did can achieve these goals in baseball games?

Adverbial clause
Although he has been a star player in Japan, he still needs to overcome a large number of challenges including different culture, different language, and advanced skill in baseball before standing on stage of MLB.

Some people used a metaphor, baseball, to describe a real life.

Only through realizing Ichiro Suzuki’s tip in baseball games, can I hit a home run of my life.
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I hope I didn't change your meanings, KK:

It is after breaking the record for most hits in a single season that Ichiro Suzuki became an Asian hero.

I think it is his advice that has helped me surmount many difficulties in my life.

What Ichiro Suzuki did is achieve these goals in baseball games. (This is actually a 'pseudo-cleft' sentence.)

Although he has been a star player in Japan, he still needs to overcome a large number of challenges, including a different culture, a different language, and advanced baseball skills before standing on the mainstage of MLB.

Some people use the metaphor of baseball to describe real life.

Only through realizing Ichiro Suzuki’s advice on baseball can I hit a home run in my life.

(I'm a big Ichiro fan too.)
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HELLO Mister Micawber Thank you for your help.

I really admire Ichiro's achievement.