Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Many people's opinions differ as to whether or not newspapers are the most convenient method to approach news both and information. While there are some strong arguments about the benefit of reading newspapers, I believe other media could be a better way.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why people might argue that newspapers do play the most crucial role in learning news and information. First, a piece of information or news formally written in newspapers would be carefully checked and verified. In contrast, information and news in other media, such as Facebook, might not be covered with double-checking. Without any doubt, the viewers might tend to daily approach with thousands of violent images or spams on those kinds of media. Second, it is said that reading traditional newspapers could prevent the people's eyes from contacting with blue-light coming directly from electric equipment's screens. As a result, the readers could avoid eye diseases, for example, eye-short sightedness. Therefore, it is recognized that the viewers could gain many benefits from newspapers.
On the other hand, despite the above argument, I support that plenty of media would contribute more advantages than newspapers. If it is concerned with convenience and speed for approaching information and news, nothing could compare with media from all accounts. To read the latest news, the viewers wait a few days later in their favorite newspapers. They could also approach those faster and more conveniently in media. In addition, all news and information posted or published on media, like Facebook, are non-fee and hardly require any cost, which takes more advantage over on newspapers. According to the national survey in 2018, the annual number of cut trees is approximately 3,000 hectares in Vietnam used for housing, wood manufacturing, and paper-making. By limiting the daily use of products made from paper included traditional newspapers, people tend to protect their environment daily. Employing media to approach news instead of newspapers might be a wiser choice to make our environment greener and more friendly.
In conclusion, newspapers are a convenient method to read news, however, I believe that other kinds of media could outweigh in the long term.

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Many people's opinions differ as to whether or not newspapers are the most convenient method to approach (wrong word) news both and information. (poor English) While there are some strong arguments about the benefit of reading newspapers, I believe other media (What other media?) could be a better way.


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On the one hand, there are several reasons why people might argue that newspapers do play the most crucial role in getting the latest learning news and information. (Off topic. It is not about information in general.) First, a piece of information or news formally written in newspapers would be carefully checked and verified. In contrast, information and news in other social media, such as Facebook, is only people's opinions. might not be covered with double-checking. Without any doubt, the viewers might tend to daily approach with thousands of violent images or spams (That makes no sense. You use the verb "approach" incorrectly.) on those kinds of media. Second, it is said that reading traditional newspapers could prevent the people's eyes from contacting with blue-light coming directly from electric equipment's screens. (I think you have memorized this answer and use it over and over again. In this essay, it makes no sense. Many newspapers are on-line, not paper. I subscribe to my local newspaper, the New York Times and the Washington Post - all are electronic copies. Many Vietnamese newspapers are online, too: https://www.w3newspapers.com/vietnam/ The question is about the source of news, not if it is paper or on line.) As a result, the readers could avoid eye diseases, for example, eye-short sightedness. Therefore, it is recognized that the viewers (Not a good word to use) could gain many benefits from newspapers.
On the other hand, despite the above argument, I support that plenty of media (Very informal. Do not use "plenty of") would contribute more advantages than newspapers. If it is concerned with convenience and speed for approaching (wrong word) information (off-topic) and news, nothing could compare with media from all accounts. To read the latest news, the viewers wait a few days later in their favorite newspapers. They could also approach (That makes no sense. You use the verb "approach" incorrectly.) those faster and more conveniently in media. In addition, all news and information posted or published on media, like Facebook, are non-fee (wrong expression) and hardly require any cost, which takes more advantage over (unnatural English) on newspapers. According to a the national survey in 2018, the annual number of cut trees (unnatural - is approximately 3,000 hectares in Vietnam used for housing, wood furniture manufacturing, and paper-making. By limiting the daily use of products made from paper included traditional newspapers, people tend to (You probably do not use the verb"tend" correctly) will protect their environment daily. Employing media to approach news instead of newspapers might be a wiser choice to make our environment greener and more friendly.
In conclusion, newspapers are a convenient method to read news, (comma splice error) however, I believe that other kinds of media are better could outweigh in the long term.

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Many people’s opinions differ on how to approach news in society nowadays. While it is argued that some media platforms could be the optimal method to gather information, I firmly believe that newspapers are more beneficial for readers.

On the one hand, there are many good reasons why the media are advocated to get information, one of which is their own high speed. There is no denying that people no longer find different traditional platforms such as papers that can convey and update news as fast as media ones. Another key reason is that users could directly express their emotions about news by sharing, commenting, and using emojis. For example, Facebook, a social networking platform, makes it easy to update and search all kinds of news and their users’ feelings about specific news in the community.

On the other hand, newspapers associated with getting news could benefit viewers rather than the media, due to their own safety and formality. Without any doubt, the amount of news in newspapers is thoroughly edited before being released, helping readers avoid junk information, spams. In fact, people are overwhelmed by news daily, choosing a reputable news source like newspapers will save their time to do other things instead of surfing on the Internet. In addition, it should be noted that images and words in newspapers are safe and suitable for all ages, eliminating exposure to blood, violent images and scary stories. If people frequently use the media to get information, they can suffer from terrible experiences which are not filtered for creepy stuff before being posted.

In conclusion, I completely agree that people should read newspapers, both traditional and e-newspapers, to seek information instead of using the media. In terms of safety, the newspapers are obviously better than the media with convenience.

Many people’s opinions differ on how to approach (Approach means to get closer to. It is not meaningful here.) what the best source for news is. in society nowadays. ("Nowadays" is not used when there is a present tense main verb. That gives the time frame. Every person in the world is in some society. "In society" is not a good phrase.) While it is argued that some media platforms TV, radio or even social media could be the optimal method to gather information about current events, I firmly believe that newspapers are more beneficial for readers.


Loan TranSome people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media.

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On the one hand, there are many good reasons why the media are advocated (Newspapers are one media. TV is another. Radio is a third. Your statement does not make any sense. ) to get information, one of which is their own high speed. There is no denying that people no longer find different traditional platforms such as papers that can convey and update news as fast as media ones. Another key reason is that users could directly express their emotions about news by sharing, commenting, and using emojis. For example, Facebook, a social networking platform, makes it easy to update and search all kinds of news and their users’ feelings about specific news in the community.

On the other hand, newspapers associated with getting news could benefit viewers rather than the media, (Newspapers are media, too!) due to their own safety and formality. Without any doubt, the amount of news in newspapers is thoroughly edited before being released, helping readers avoid junk information, spams. (missing conjunction) In fact, people are overwhelmed by news daily, (comma splice error) choosing a reputable news source like newspapers will save their time to do other things instead of surfing on the Internet. (What about radio and TV?) In addition, it should be noted that images and words in newspapers are safe and suitable for all ages, eliminating exposure to blood, violent images and scary stories. If people frequently use the media (Newspapers are one kind of media...) to get information, they can suffer from terrible experiences which are not filtered for creepy stuff before being posted.

In conclusion, I completely agree that people should read newspapers, both traditional and e-newspapers, to seek information instead of using the media. In terms of safety, the newspapers are obviously better than the media with convenience.

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Many people’s opinions differ on what the best source for news is. While it is argued that newspapers could be the optimal method to gather information, I firmly believe that the other media such as television, radio or social networking websites are more beneficial for readers.

On the one hand, newspapers associated with keeping up with current events could benefit readers rather than the other media, due to their own safety and formality. Without any doubt, the amount of news in newspapers is thoroughly edited before being released, helping people avoid spams. In fact, people are overwhelmed by the massive quantity of events daily; thus, choosing a reliable news source like newspapers will save their time to do other things. In addition, it should be noted that many images and words in newspapers are safe and appropriate for their readers regardless of age as they are eliminated blood, violent images or scary stories. If people frequently use the other media platforms to seek news, they can suffer from terrible experiences since creepy stuff is not filtered before being posted.

On the other hand, there are various good reasons why the other means of media, particularly television, radio or even social networking platforms, are advocated to learn news, one of which is their own high speed. There is no denying that people no longer find papers that can convey and update breaking news as rapidly as the other media platforms. Another key reason is that people who use social networking sites to get news could directly express their emotions by sharing, commenting, and using emojis. For example, Facebook, a social networking platform, makes it easy to post and search all kinds of news, as well as, share their users’ feelings about specific news in the community.

In conclusion, I completely agree that people should use other media such as television or social platforms to gather news instead of reading newspapers. In terms of convenience, the other means of media are far more predominant than newspapers, both traditional and e-newspapers.

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Many people’s opinions differ on what the best source for news is. While it is argued that newspapers could be the optimal method to keep up with what is happening in the world gather information, (It is not about getting general information. News tells us what is going on at the present time in the world, our nation, our city and even our neighborhood.) I firmly believe that the other media such as television, radio or social networking websites are more beneficial for readers.

On the one hand, newspapers associated with keeping up with current events could benefit readers rather than the other media, due to their own safety and formality. Without any doubt, the amount of news in newspapers is thoroughly edited before being released, helping people avoid hype and misinformation. spams. (Spam is non-count. Spam is for emails. Emails have no relationship with newspapers. ) In fact, people are overwhelmed by the massive quantity of events daily; thus, choosing a reliable news source like newspapers will save their time to do other things. In addition, it should be noted that many images and words in newspapers are safe and appropriate for their readers regardless of age as they are eliminated (wrong verb form. Wrong verb) do not contain blood, violent images or scary stories. If people frequently use the other media platforms to seek news, they can suffer from terrible experiences since creepy stuff is not filtered before being posted.

On the other hand, there are various good reasons why the other means of media, particularly television, radio or even social networking platforms, are superior advocated to learn get the news, one of which is that they are more current and announce breaking news as it happens. their own high speed. There is no denying that people no longer find papers that can convey and update breaking news as rapidly as the other media platforms. Another key reason is that people who use social networking sites to get news could directly express their emotions by sharing, commenting, and using emojis. For example, Facebook, a social networking platform, makes it easy to post and search all kinds of news, as well as, share their users’ feelings about specific news in the community.

In conclusion, I completely agree that people should use other media such as television or social networking platforms to gather news instead of reading newspapers. In terms of convenience, the other means of media are far more predominant better than newspapers, both traditional and e-newspapers.

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