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In recent years, the environment has been severely damaged and this is considered a global problem. This results in floods, tsunami, earthquake,s and many more disasters those happened recently. It is impossible to blame these consequences on any individual person or country, everyone has to take responsibility for these issues. Thus, I agree that it is time for the world to unite and help ourselves.

Initially, this crisis impacts everyone all over the world, from the northernmost countries such as China, Russia to the Equatorial ones like India or Vietnam. At first, the rise of sea level causes floods in every country, which limits human habitat. Moreover, the change of earth temperature also activates many extinct volcanoes under the sea, this puts civilization at risk of suffering catastrophes. Thus, it can be clearly seen that this issue influences everyone on this planet and all governments should give a hand if they want to reduce the impacts of climate change.

Secondly, as abovementioned, this crisis can’t be caused by either a person or a country individually. Therefore, not a single country has enough ability and resources to deal with this. Take, for example, many developing countries are trying to stimulate their economy so they can keep pace with the others, regardless of environmental consequences. If there are no organizations restricting this, many such countries would invest more in industrialization without caring for pollution. Therefore, we need organizations where governments unite to control these activities, relative countries also need to take action to punish such as isolation or economic sanction. Definitely, the developing ones will have to regulate their policy to develop and preserve environment status simultaneously. You can easily draw out that it is much more efficient when governments reunite and protect our world.

To reiterate, nowadays, environment is one of the most threatening issues to human beings. Hence, It is time for the whole world to be responsible for this problem and there is no one or country that can stay out of this war.

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You need to read the topic very carefully. You strayed off-topic quite a bit. The topic is not about global warming or climate change. It is not about who has caused the damage.


Also, write ideas that are scientifically correct. For example, floods, earthquakes, volcanos and tsunamis are natural events. They have been happening on earth for its entire geological history - certainly before animals ever existed..


In recent years, the environment has been severely damaged and this is considered a global problem. This results in floods, tsunami, earthquake,s (I do not understand. earthquakes and tsunamis are natural phenomena caused by the movements of the earth's crust. They have nothing to do with environmental damage caused by human activity.) and many more disasters those (wrong word) happened recently. It is impossible to blame these consequences (That is off-topic. It is not about blame. ) on any individual person or country, everyone has to take responsibility for these issues. Thus, I agree that it is time for the world to unite and help ourselves.

(You did not answer the essay prompt. "To what extent do you agree?"

You must answer with an adverb of extent.

For example:

I completely agree that this is an international problem that both individuals and countries must cooperate to address these problems.

I somewhat agree; the damage to the environment is a major problem, but the rich countries have done most of the damage, and they should be the ones to provide the resources to fix the problem.

I totally disagree; every country should focus on cleaning up the environmental damage within own borders..


Initially, this crisis impacts everyone all over the world, from the northernmost countries such as China, Russia to the Equatorial ones like India or Vietnam. At first, the rise of sea level (Off-topic) causes floods in every country, which limits human habitat. Moreover, the change of earth temperature also activates many extinct volcanoes under the sea, (That is not scientifically true. The surface temperature has nothing to do with volcanic activity.) this puts civilization at risk of suffering catastrophes. Thus, it can be clearly seen that this issue influences everyone on this planet and all governments should give a hand if they want to reduce the impacts of climate change. (The topic is not climate change. It is environmental damage, such as deforestation, pollution of water and air, and destruction of natural habitats. Most of this paragraph is not focused on the task.)

Secondly, as abovementioned, (Do not use the word "abovementioned") this crisis can’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) be caused (wrong word. The topic is not who caused the problem) by either a person or a country individually. Therefore, not a single country has enough ability and resources to deal with this. Take, for example, many developing countries are trying to stimulate their economy so they can keep pace with the others, regardless of environmental consequences. If there are no organizations restricting this, many such countries would invest more in industrialization without caring for pollution. Therefore, we need organizations where governments unite to control these activities, (comma splice error) relative (wrong word) countries also need to take action to punish those who damage the environment such as isolation or economic sanction. Definitely, the developing ones will have to regulate their policy to develop sustainably. and preserve environment status simultaneously. You can easily draw out (wrong word) deduce that it is much more efficient when governments reunite and protect our world.

To reiterate, nowadays, environment (wrong subject - the environment is not the threat; it is further damaging the environment.) is one of the most threatening issues to human beings. ((wrong word) Hence, It is time for the whole world to be responsible for this problem and there is no one or country that should refuse to participate. can stay out of this war.

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Nowadays, environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual person or individual country. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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