It is true that young people spend more time watching many programs and focusing on video games. Many people believe that teenager’s activities are not good for their health and behavior, I therefore agree with the statement that watching TV and playing video games will harm young people’s health if they spend more time with them.
The first reason for this is teenager addiction to electronic devices. This could be explained by the fact that young people cannot stand a day without them, and they tend to depend on television or video games. As a result, young people will do anything to have time or money to watch TV programs and play video games. In addition, the light from the computer screen will visual damage such as short-sightedness, and eyestrain. Moreover, regular use of electronic devices will reduce physical training ability, fatigue, and laziness exercise in the age of young people cause a lot of health problems such as obesity, slow brain development, and stroke risk.
Secondly, some TV programs and video games are violent, which is also a big issue. There are many video games and movies that become more realistic leading to the effect of thinking of young people. For example, shooting, and killing from many actions of movie characters or video game characters. Therefore, impacts viewers, especially teenagers because they can imitate the behavior of the characters.
Last but not least, teenagers who spend more time watching movies or focusing on video games will see more problems in their daily life as I mentioned. In my opinion, I think parents should set limits on the time about using electronic devices every day for their children. Encouraging teenagers to join extracurricular activities to broaden their knowledge.
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It is true that young people spend more time watching many programs and focusing on video games. Many people believe that teenager’s activities are not good for their health and behavior, I therefore agree with the statement that watching TV and playing video games will harm young people’s health if they spend more time with them.
The first reason for this is teenager addiction to electronic devices. This could be explained by the fact that young people cannot stand a day without them, and they tend to depend on television or video games. As a result, young people will do anything to have time or money to watch TV programs and play video games. In addition, the light from the computer screen will visual damage such as short-sightedness, and eyestrain. Moreover, regular use of electronic devices will reduce physical training ability, fatigue, and laziness exercise in the age of young people cause a lot of health problems such as obesity, slow brain development, and stroke risk.
Secondly, some TV programs and video games are violent, which is also a big issue. There are many video games and movies that become more realistic leading to the effect of thinking of young people. For example, shooting, and killing from many actions of movie characters or video game characters. Therefore, impacts viewers, especially teenagers because they can imitate the behavior of the characters.
Last but not least, teenagers who spend more time watching movies or focusing on video games will see more problems in their daily life as I mentioned. In my opinion, I think parents should set limits on the time about using electronic devices every day for their children. Encouraging teenagers to join extracurricular activities to broaden their knowledge.
It is true that young people spend more time watching many programs and focusing on video games. Many people believe that teenager’s activities are not good for their health and behavior, I therefore agree with the statement that watching TV and playing video games will harm young people’s health if they spend more time with them.
The first reason for this is teenager addiction to electronic devices. This could be explained by the fact that young people cannot stand a day without them, and they tend to depend on television or video games. As a result, young people will do anything to have time or money to watch TV programs and play video games. In addition, the light from the computer screen will visual damage such as short-sightedness, and eyestrain. Moreover, regular use of electronic devices will reduce physical training ability, fatigue, and laziness exercise in the age of young people cause a lot of health problems such as obesity, slow brain development, and stroke risk.
Secondly, some TV programs and video games are violent, which is also a big issue. There are many video games and movies that become more realistic leading to the effect of thinking of young people. For example, shooting, and killing from many actions of movie characters or video game characters. Therefore, impacts viewers, especially teenagers because they can imitate the behavior of the characters.
Last but not least, teenagers who spend more time watching movies or focusing on video games will see more problems in their daily life as I mentioned. In my opinion, I think parents should set limits on the time about using electronic devices every day for their children. Encouraging teenagers to join extracurricular activities to broaden their knowledge.