a very short paragraph, please help.. appreciated!

In a short story “Greasy Lake” by T. Coraghessan Boyl, the author reveals a moment of enlightened transformation in three young men as they go through a number of mistakes and consequences. The three characters see themselves as ‘bad characters’. However, they are not born in the streets. They are just rebellion teenagers. Furthermore, Boyl wants to show us the different between a bad character and a bad character wanna-be. This story reflects all of the young people’s turning point on the road to maturity. The three characters realize there are people who do not have to act badly because they are bad. In addition, not all young people are ‘fortunate’ to find a dead body floating in the lake to evaluate their own lives. The narrator submerges into the dirty water of Greasy Lake and come up with a better sense of maturity and understanding. In conclusion, “Greasy Lake” is a story of revelation. The events of the night will forever influence the three characters’ future actions and behavior as they learn valuable lessons.
In a short story “Greasy Lake” by T. Coraghessan Boyl, the author reveals a moment of enlightened transformation in three young men as they experienced a number of mistakes and their consequences.

The three characters see themselves as ‘bad characters’. However, they are not born 'bad'. They are just rebellious teenagers. Furthermore, Boyl wants to show us the difference between a bad character and a bad character wanna-be.

This story reflects their turning point to maturity. The three characters realize that there are people who do not have to act badly because they are bad. In addition, not all young people have to experience finding a dead body in the lake to evaluate their own lives.

The narrator uses the scene of the dirty water of Greasy Lake and come up with a better sense of maturity and understanding. (you have to rewrite this, I think.)

In conclusion, “Greasy Lake” is a story of revelation. The events of the night will forever influence the three characters’ future actions and behavior, having learned valuable lessons.

Chris
thank man.. . I have to write 4 responses every week.. it drives me nuts..