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Hi

Can anyone help pointing out the mistakes in this paragraph?

First of all I would like to thank you for the pleasant interaction I had with you this morning. I must tell you that your institution, set in serene environment, is one such place where any person who has passion for teaching will love to work for. That was my feeling when I first stepped into the institution this morning.

Thank you

Suresh
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Thank you for taking the time to meet with me this morning.

My initial impression of your institution was one of great serenity. It is exactly the sort of place that a instructor such as myself could easily blend into and manifest my great passion for teaching.
Thank you for your effort. However I would be helped if could point out which phrases or expressions are unidiomatic.

Suresh
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The only idiom in my suggested paragraph is 'blend into'.

In this case, to blend into means to easily incorporate oneself into an organization. You are stating that you believe that you could easily become a valuable working element of such a fine organization.

Does this help?
Hi JohnParis

I would like you to tell which of my expressions or phrases are unidiomatic, that is, not natural to a native.

Suresh
Dear Suresh,

I believe that I understand your request .

Before I answer your question, may I ask you one (or two)?

Is your paragraph part of a letter that you are writing to someone you met recently? Someone that conducted an interview with you wherein you were applying for a job - or expressing interest in getting a job or working for the person to whom you are writing?

John
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Hi JohnParis,

It is a letter to the person who has interviewed me for a teaching job.
I thought so.

English speakers do not say 'pleasant interaction'.

I still feel that the following is a good example of a follow-up post inverview letter.

Dear X,

Thank you for taking the time to meet with me this morning.

My initial impression of your institution was one of great serenity. It is exactly the sort of environment that a instructor such as myself could easily blend into and manifest my great passion for teaching.

Hope this helps.

Oh yes - I almost forgot. It is always important to thank the person that gave you the interview.