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Extremism, violence, intolerance is one of the major problems in today's world. To tackle this problem and promote values of moderation and tolerance in society, the study and implementation of Shah Waliullah's ideology and philosophy can be very useful. By implementing Shah Sahib's approach, if the differences are to be applied rather than discriminated against and differences can be promoted by consensus or constructive criticism rather than criticism for the sake of criticism, then our society may be on the path to development and stability. ۔

Extremism, violence, intolerance is one (That seems like three problems, not just one. The phrase needs a conjunction. Do you mean "Extremism, which begets intolerance, acrimony and violence" ? Then "extremism" is the one problem, which manifests itself in several ways. ) of the major problems in today's world. To tackle this problem and promote values of moderation and tolerance in society, the study and implementation (We do not implement ideology or philosophy. We can live by, act, behave or make laws in accordance with it.) of Shah Waliullah's ideology and philosophy can be very useful. By implementing Shah Sahib's approach, if the differences are to be applied (I do not understand "apply differences" We can resolve our differences or negotiate or make compromises based on our differences. ) rather than discriminated against (I don't understand "discriminate against differences." Usually people discriminate against others who are of a different class or race or religion.) and differences can be promoted (Promoting differences makes for disunity, not harmony.) by consensus or constructive criticism rather than criticism for the sake of criticism, then our society may be on the path to development and stability. ۔

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Thanks AS. I have made changes to the paragraph. Please have a look at this.

Extremism, violence, intolerance are the major problems in today's world. To tackle these problems and need to promote values of moderation and tolerance in society, the study and behaving in accordance with Shah Waliullah's ideology and philosophy can be very useful. If we live by Shah Sahib's approach and stop going against each other on the bases of scholastic differences, we will develop mutual understanding and acceptance. Moreover, to promote social and religious harmony we need consensus or constructive criticism rather than criticism for the sake of criticism, only then our society can be on the path to development and stability.

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Extremism, violence, intolerance are the major problems in today's world. To tackle these problems and need to promote values of moderation and tolerance in society, the studying and behaving in accordance with Shah Waliullah's ideology and philosophy can be very useful. If we live by Shah Sahib's approach, and stop going against each other on the basis of scholastic differences, we will develop mutual understanding and acceptance. Moreover, to promote social and religious harmony we need consensus or constructive criticism rather than criticism for the sake of criticism, only then can our society can be on the path to development and stability.

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