'Capacity to learn is gifted. Ability to learn is a skill. Willingness to learn is a choice' discuss in a short paragraph.
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Learning does not occur accidently; learners, in order to achieve their goal, should take factors of learning into account: intellectuality,skillness, and real intention. First of all, some individuals are by nature competent; they born with high innate intake. In other words this kind of people posses the capacity to recieve information easily and effectivelly and can find solutions, aswell, to solve problems with little or no assistance. Second, proficiency is often acquired through hard work and constant practice. It is said that practice makes perfect and trainning makes the impossible possible. Finally, least not last, somtimes when learners get overwhelmed and exhausted because of the sustained efforts, their determination for success fuels them with motivation and enthusiasm to keep on the track. Briefly, cleverness, proficiency and thoughtful planning are crucial ingredients for acquiring vast knowledge.
You use far too many semicolons. They should be used sparingly and judiciously. I've highlighted some other problems.

Learning does not occur accidently; learners, in order to achieve their goal, should take factors of learning into account: intellectuality,skillness, and real intention. First of all, some individuals are by nature competent; they born with high innate intake. In other words this kind of people posses the capacity to recieve information easily and effectivelly and can find solutions, aswell, to solve problems with little or no assistance. Second, proficiency is often acquired through hard work and constant practice. It is said that practice makes perfect and trainning makes the impossible possible. Finally, least not last, somtimes when learners get overwhelmed and exhausted because of the sustained efforts, their determination for success fuels them with motivation and enthusiasm to keep on the track. Briefly, cleverness, proficiency and thoughtful planning are crucial ingredients for acquiring vast knowledge.
Thanks for correcting my wor. I revised the paragpaph and I edit the spelling mistakes ( the wordsI highlited in redcolour). the rest words I didnt change because I couldn't figureout what is wrong in them. I hope you could correct it for me again. and I want you to check if the vocabulary are used appropriatly. Thank you in advance.

Learning does not occur accidently. learners, in order to achieve their goal, should take factors of learning into account: intelligence, skillfulness, and real intention. First of all, some individuals are by nature mentally competent. They born with high innate intake. In other words,this kind of people possess the capacity to receive information easily and effectively and can find solutions, as well, to solve problems with little or no assistance. Second, proficiency is often acquired through hard work and constant practice. It is said that practice makes perfect and training makes the impossible possible. Finally, sometimes when learners get overwhelmed and exhausted because of the sustained efforts, their determination for success fuels them with motivation and enthusiasm to keep on track. Briefly, cleverness, proficiency and thoughtful planning are crucial ingredients for acquiring vast knowledge.
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Learning does not occur accidentally. learners, in order to achieve their goal, should take the factors of learning into account: intelligence, skillfulness, and real intention. First of all, some individuals are by nature mentally competent. They born with high innate intake.(This is not a good combination. See "aptitude") In other words,this kind of people (These people) possess the capacity to receive information easily and effectively and can find solutions as well as to solve problems with little or no assistance. Second, proficiency is often acquired through hard work and constant practice. It is said that practice makes perfect and training makes the impossible possible. Finally, sometimes when learners get overwhelmed and exhausted because of the sustained efforts, their determination for success fuels them with motivation and enthusiasm to keep on track. Briefly, cleverness, proficiency and thoughtful planning are crucial ingredients for acquiring vast knowledge.
All right. I see now. Thank you very much.