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Could you please help me with the paragraph below?

This is academic text in British English.

I have marked the phrases/words that I am unsure of in capital letters. In addition, I am not sure of punctuation (commas).

"The introduction of the formulation and the relevant elements of this theory as presented by the leading figures of the ‘Realist School’, is followed by sub-chapters that discuss the various types of criticism RAISED ON the approach in general, or certain aspects or even details of it. These debates are STARTEDwith the introduction of the concept of security and the criticism this has AROUSED. I contend that this theory can be used to analyse BOTH social mobilisation, its suppression, and resistance (to the suppression) within the same framework. I posit that A perception of threats, repression and action are logically, and at times also practically, separate."
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Hi,

This is academic text in British English.

I have marked the phrases/words that I am unsure of in capital letters. In addition, I am not sure of punctuation (commas).

Here are a few edits and comments.

"The introduction of the formulation and the relevant elements of this theory as presented by the leading figures of the ‘Realist School’ no comma is followed by sub-chapters that discuss the various types of criticism RAISED over the approach in general, or certain aspects or even details of it. These debates begin with the introduction of the concept of security and the criticism this has AROUSED. I contend that this theory can be used to analyse no 'both', you have a list of 3 things BOTH social mobilisation, its suppression, and resistance (to the suppression) can you reword it in a way that eliminates the brackets? within the same framework. I posit that the perceptions of threats, of repression and of action are logically, and at times also practically, separate."

Clive
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Many thanks!

Just one follow-up question: the last sentence. Would it be possible to state that

"I posit that the perception of threats, repression and action are logically, and at times also practically, separate."

i.e 'perception' in singular, omitting the word 'of' from the two following nouns?

sleepless - again
Hi,

Just one follow-up question: the last sentence. Would it be possible to state that

"I posit that the perception of threats, repression and action are logically, and at times also practically, separate."

i.e 'perception' in singular, omitting the word 'of' from the two following nouns?

'Perception' needs a singular verb.

Your original incorrectly has I posit that the perception . . . . .are . . . .

You need to say either I posit that the perception . . . . is . . . .

or I posit that the perceptions. . . are . . . .

For your meaning, you need to say it the plural way. You are talking about three perceptions.

In my original edits, I added the two extra 'ofs' to strengthen the idea that they were three separate perceptions.

Clive