Could someone please edit this short passage for me. Thank you very much.

Last Sunday, Sam was walking home when he spotted a nest in a tree. He wanted to take the eggs, so he climbed up the tree. He was very happy when he was sitting on the branch of the tree where the eggs were. Just as he was about to remove an egg from the nest, a very strong wind blew and the nest fell onto the ground.

Sam quickly climbed down from the tree. He was going to take the eggs when he saw that every one of them was broken. He was very disappointed.

On his way home, he kept thinking of how the wind had prevented him from having the eggs.

Hi,

Last Sunday, Sam was walking home when he spotted a nest in a tree. He wanted to take/get the eggs, so he climbed up. He was very happy when he was sitting on the branch where they were. Just as he was about to remove one from the nest, a very strong wind blew and it fell on the ground.

Sam quickly climbed down. He was going to get the eggs when he saw that every one of them was broken. He was very disappointed.

On his way home, he kept thinking of how the wind had prevented him from getting them.

Try to avoid a lot of repetition of nouns.

Best wishes, Clive
Clive

Could you please tell me where the repetitions are so that I've a very clear picture and do away with them in future? Thank you very much.
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For example you've overused the word tree. It sounds very repetitive. When you constantly repeat a simple noun in this way it ends up sounding like a child's 'learn-to-read' workbook. You can see how Clive dealt with the problem.
Nona The BritFor example you've overused the word tree. It sounds very repetitive. When you constantly repeat a simple noun in this way it ends up sounding like a child's 'learn-to-read' workbook. You can see how Clive dealt with the problem.
Thanks, Nona. I agree with you.
Hi Clive

I was in a hurry to go out and didn't realise that you had corrected the passage. That's why I asked you to highlight the words repeated.

I'm sorry about that.

Thank you very much for your assistance.
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