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Hi,

Could somebody have a look at those two paragraphs?

YYY’s development needs are quantified by the plan in 3,200 new dwellings per year between 2006 and 2026. About 24,500 new dwellings are to be built in four search areas, which leaves a total of 40,000 to be built in the area designated to accommodate YYY’s needs, which wholly includes ZZZ.

(where: YYY is a big city and ZZZ a small town in the surroundings)




On the basis of the needs assessed, and pursuing sustainability as central objective, the following aims have been identified:

- provide a solution, even though/however partial, to the housing needs identified (both general and affordable);

- develop local expertise by training local workers, students, and the general public in sustainable construction technology and methods;

- make better use of locally available resources and infrastructures and take advantage of brownfield opportunities.

I'm especially unsure about the underlined words.

Thank you in advance!

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Hi,

YYY’s development needs are quantified by the plan to build 3,200 new dwellings per year between 2006 and 2026. About 24,500 new dwellings are to be built in four search areas (what is a search area?) , which leaves a total of 40,000 to be built in the area designated to accommodate YYY’s needs, which completely includes ZZZ.

(where: YYY is a big city and ZZZ a small town in the surroundings)

On the basis of the needs assessed, and pursuing sustainability as the central objective, the following aims have been identified:

- provide a solution, even though/however either, or just say 'a partial solution'? partial, to the housing needs identified (both general <<< I thought it was a partial solution? and affordable);

- develop local expertise by training local workers, students, and the general public in sustainable construction technology and methods; 'Train' may not be the best word. Perhaps 'educate them about'. Train the public' sounds like you want to teach them to buld houses.Emotion: smile

- make better use of locally available resources and infrastructures and take advantage of brownfield << what does this word mean? opportunities.

Best wishes, Clive
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Hi, Clive,

Thank you for your answer!

- 'Train' may not be the best word. Perhaps 'educate them about'. Train the public' sounds like you want to teach them to buld houses.Emotion: smile Happy to hear that ... that's exactly what it means. Emotion: smile

As for your questions, well ... I was well suggested in another thread (by Goodman) that I should avoid technical jargon (my background: civil engineeer and urban planner). However, I can't think of another way to convey those meanings!

(from: OALD) 'Brownfield - adjective[only before noun] (BrE) used to describe an area of land in a city that was used by industry or for offices in the past and that may now be cleared for new building development: a brownfield site'

'Search areas' - are defined and identified by the County Structure plan (SW of England) as the priority areas where to plan new developments.

Since you asked me about those two, I imagine they would not be understood or they are misused. Is it so?

Hi again,

When you are considering the use of technical terms or jargon, you have to consider your target audience. In other words, are you writing for other specialists, or for the general public?

Best wishes, Clive