Could anyone give me a hand to check the letter? Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a Chinese student who wishes to study a master degree in your university next semester. I would like to inquiry some information as to studying in the university.

First of all, I am concerned about the accommodation situation there. I heard about students could either chose live in the campus or off the campus. Could you please inform me the difference between the two options, particularly in terms of rent, as well as the application requirements?

Second, the tuition fees is quite a big amount of money to me. I want to know whether the university offers scholarship to international students and what maximum amount it is.

Finally, I am wondering whether I am eligible to go on pursuing a PHD degree after obtaining the master certificate in your university.

These are all the things I want to clarify now. Could you please be kind enough t provide me with the relevant information? Your prompt response will be highly appreciated.

Yours faithfully,

Joe
Hi Anon,

Good letter. I have changed some mistakes and edited your letter a bit. Don't forget to tell them what you're actually planning to study. Good luck! Emotion: smile

Best wishes,
NewPhilologist
Anonymous
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a Chinese student who would like to pursue a master's degree in Law? Physics? English? at your university next semester. I would like to request some information about studying at your university.

First of all, I have heard about students can either live on campus or off campus. Could you please inform me about the differences between the two options, particularly in terms of rent, as well as the application requirements?

Second, the tuition fee is quite a big amount of money to me. I would like to know whether your university offers scholarships to international students and how much of the tuition such scholarships would cover.

Finally, I am wondering whether I would eligible to pursue a Ph. D. in Law? Physics? English? after obtaining a master's degree at your university.

Could you please be kind enough to provide me with the relevant information? Your prompt response will be highly appreciated.

Yours faithfully,

Joe

This is with reference to my transfer to kalicut

I would like to remind you that this is my 3rd transfer within 1 year, I am not able to understand why are you transfering me so frequently , these transfers effecting my sales performance as bell as my family life.

now you are transferring me in the month of august, you have to understand that my son is studying in class IV , its mid term time of his school. I can't disturb his study at this time.language also one of the big problem for him also( he is already lost one year when I was transferd in Aug 2006)

My son's treatment is going on at AIIMS NEW DELHI , and my wife also not well. I can't leave them alone at Delhi . In case of any emergency who will take care my family because I can reach Delhi only after 40 -48 hours from kalicut.

in the present situation I can move along with family only after jan. - feb2010

thanks & regards