In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that are grown in other areas. As a result, they eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Over the past decades, daily diet has gained currency an issue of broad interest to the general public. Many adopt a view that they prefer exotic food from other regions rather than indigenous food. While this tendency is becoming popular and has several benefits. However, to the best of my knowledge its drawback are more considerable for the following reasons.

Firstly, there is no point in denying that food from other countries is far too fabulous .Nowadays, many nutritionist studies have shown that food are imported from other regions to increase the varieties of food, thereby guaranteeing the sufficient intake of nutrition .For instance, those who live in cold areas where severe weather poses various difficulties to farming activities. Thus, they can consume fruits that they are grown in tropical regions, striking (achieving) a balance the consumption of meat and fiber. In addition, this development could encourage bilateral trading activities between different areas. For example, a country or region can channel into manufacturing industrial products and exchange them with others, which is consistent with the global trend of specialization.

Secondly, another point that should be taken into account is the fact that they eat more food from foreign countries, it is more likely to have devastating impact on sound lifestyle (the more food from foreign countries they eat, the more likely to have devastating impact on sound lifestyle). An argument raised by objectors to this is that exotic food is marvelous for people’s health, because of its products less fertilizers and pesticides. This justification is probably true to some extent; nevertheless, it should be acknowledge that one of its potential harms is that to prolong fruit longevity, especially that of perishable agricultural products, preservatives are commonly used in food processing, which wreaks havoc on consumer’s health, as these additives may contain some detrimental substances. In addition, another problem that should be taken into account is that excessive consumption of exotic fruits and ignoring the possibility of developing industrialised farming may disable a country from striking food security or self-sufficiency. A telling example is Norway, statistics have shown that increasing preference to imported food has made this country heavily dependent on food supply from neighboring countries.

In conclusion, under no circumstances should citizens use domestic products. Give that, exotic products have devastating impact on sound lifestyle for reasons as mentioned above.

You wrote a lot about exotic food, but did not mention local food very much. This comparison the main topic of the essay. You need to read the topic carefully and write a more balanced essay on the topic.


Over the past decades, daily diet has gained currency an issue of broad interest to the general public.


That is not good. It seems like you have memorized this "issue of broad interest to the general public" as a standard opening to any Task 2 essay. It is so general that it can apply to any subject whatsoever, even when it is not a true statement..

The examiners do not look with favor on memorized openings.

Your opening sentence should say something true and relevant to the topic. Use your own experience and knowledge.

e.g.

The increase in global trade for electronics, cars, toys and clothing has also included food items. Some imported fruits, such as bananas and oranges, are available year-round in every supermarket, even though they are not grown by local farmers. My family regularly enjoys imported cheeses and biscuits, and we have become used to them. However, there are some drawbacks to being too dependent on imported food items and I believe these outweigh the benefits.


Many adopt a view that they prefer exotic food from other regions rather than locally-produced indigenous food. While this tendency is becoming popular and has several benefits. (That is not a complete sentence.) However, to the best of my knowledge (comma) its drawback (wrong form) are more considerable for the following reasons.

Firstly, First, there is no point in denying that food from other countries is delicious far too fabulous .Nowadays, (spacing error. Also, "fabulous" does not really go with food.) many nutritionist studies have shown that food are is imported from other regions to increase the varieties of food, thereby guaranteeing the sufficient intake of nutrition .For (spacing error. Also "intake of nutrition" does not make sense. Do you mean calories? or vitamins? ) instance, those who live in cold areas where severe weather poses various difficulties to farming activities. (That is not a complete sentence. It is a noun phrase.) Thus, they can consume fruits that they are grown in tropical regions, striking (achieving) a balance the consumption (ungrammatical You are missing a preposition.) of meat and fiber. In addition, this development could encourage bilateral trading activities between different areas. For example, a country or region can manufacture channel into manufacturing industrial products and exchange them for agricultural products. with others, which is consistent with the global trend of specialization. (That is off-topic.)

Secondly, Second, another point that should be taken into account is the fact that they (Who are you talking about? "They" needs a reference to some people you have mentioned before.) eat more food from foreign countries, it is more likely to have devastating impact on sound lifestyle ("sound lifestyle" is incorrect. It is "healthy lifestyle" - which includes getting 8 hours of sleep, sufficient aerobic exercise, and a balanced diet. How does imported food adversely affect one's lifestyle? ) (the more food from foreign countries they eat, the more likely to have devastating impact on sound lifestyle). An argument raised by objectors to this is that exotic food is marvelous for people’s health, because of its products less fertilizers and pesticides. (Ungrammatical. Do you mean that local farmers use a lot of fertilizers and pesticides?) This justification is probably true to some extent; nevertheless, it should be acknowledge (wrong form) that one of its potential harms is that to prolong fruit longevity, especially that of perishable agricultural products, preservatives are commonly used in food processing, (I do not understand. Fruit is not processed food. It contains no additives. What food are you talking about? ) which wreaks havoc on consumer’s health, as these additives may contain some detrimental substances. In addition, another problem that should be taken into account is that excessive consumption of exotic fruits and ignoring the possibility of developing industrialised farming may disable a country from striking (wrong word) achieving food security or self-sufficiency. A telling example is Norway, (comma error. This is a comma splice, an ungrammatical sentence.) statistics have shown that increasing preferences for to imported food has made this country heavily dependent on food supplied from neighboring countries.

In conclusion, under no circumstances should citizens use domestic products. (You wrote here that people should never eat food from local farms and they should never buy clothes or anything else made by local companies. .) Give (wrong form) that, exotic imported products have devastating impact on sound lifestyle for reasons as mentioned above.

Thank you teacher so much.