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It is universally accepted that couples all over the world are delaying their parenthood. This phenomenon stems from which several impacts on social and family aspects will be outlined in this essay.

The primary cause for people who are having children late is that they want to focus on developing their career. It is because having children can interrupt this process.For example, it takes the women at least 6 months off for the maternity leave when they have childbirth.One another actor adding to this to this phenomenon have tendency of following DINK because they want to enjoy their own life without bothering about their children. Furthermore, poor financial condition is also the reason for remaining childless.It could be explained by the fact that the cost of childcare is very high.

There are two main family effects resulting from this tendency.Firstly, delaying parenthood can do harm to mother and children’s health. However, this situation can do good to children because of the fact that they will have better conditions in terms of healthcare and education.Additionally, getting pregnant also impacts society. Later childbirth is able to make a dedicated workforce in the short term, which can lead to economic development. By contrast, that might cause an aging population,this can result in a lack of a young and enthusiastic labor force in the future.

In conclusion, that males and females remain childless is a reason for having a better life and lead to many effects on human life.

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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

It is universally accepted that couples all over the world are delaying their parenthood. This phenomenon stems from which several impacts on social and family aspects will be outlined in this essay.

The primary cause for people who are having children late is that they want to focus on developing their career. It is because having children can interrupt this process.For example, it takes the women at least 6 months off for the maternity leave when they have childbirth.One another actor adding to this to this phenomenon have tendency of following DINK because they want to enjoy their own life without bothering about their children. Furthermore, poor financial condition is also the reason for remaining childless.It could be explained by the fact that the cost of childcare is very high.

There are two main family effects resulting from this tendency.Firstly, delaying parenthood can do harm to mother and children’s health. However, this situation can do good to children because of the fact that they will have better conditions in terms of healthcare and education.Additionally, getting pregnant also impacts society. Later childbirth is able to make a dedicated workforce in the short term, which can lead to economic development. By contrast, that might cause an aging population,this can result in a lack of a young and enthusiastic labor force in the future.

In conclusion, that males and females remain childless is a reason for having a better life and lead to many effects on human life.

It is universally accepted that couples all over the world are delaying their parenthood. This phenomenon (wrong word) stems from which several impacts on social and family aspects will be outlined in this essay. Your sentence is ungrammatical. Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. Do not tell them this. Instead, answer the essay prompt ( Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?) and give a hint at your main point. To get a good score, you must answer the prompts clearly. There are two in this task. You answered the first, but not the second, so your "task response" score will not be good.


The primary cause for people who are having children late is that they want to focus on developing their career. It is because having children can interrupt this process.For example, it takes the women take at least six 6 months off for the maternity leave when they have childbirth.One another actor (wrong word) adding to this to this (Strange repetition) phenomenon (wrong word.) have tendency of following DINK (Do not use acronyms without defining them. I do not know what you mean. ) because they want to enjoy their own life without bothering about their children. Furthermore, poor financial condition (That does not make sense) is also the reason for remaining childless.It could be explained by the fact that the cost of childcare is very high.

There are two main family effects resulting from this tendency. Firstly, First, delaying parenthood can do harm to the mother's and children’s health. However, this situation can be do good to for children because of the fact that they will have better conditions in terms of healthcare and education.Additionally, getting pregnant also impacts society. (I do not understand this point. How does a woman's pregnancy impact society?) Later childbirth is able to make a dedicated workforce in the short term, which can lead to economic development. By contrast, that might cause an aging population,this can result in a lack of a young and enthusiastic labor force in the future. (Your arguments are not very logical. There are poor transitions.)

In conclusion, that males (males are not capable of producing offspring.) and females remain childless (Off topic. Childless means that they never have any children. ) is a reason for having a better life and lead to many effects on human life. (Unnatural)