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Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

These days, more and more young people are moving from rural areas to urban ones for working and studying. This essay will discuss the cogent reasons why this happens and I believe that the advantages of this development are less significant than its disadvantages.

In general, there are two primary reasons why young people are moving to city. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that most well-known universities and colleges are in cities. As a result, young people are forced to relocate to cities. A further solid reason in favour of this is that most reputable companies are in cities. This is because most young people want to pursue glittering careers and receive six-figure salaries without physical-nature work

From an overall perspective, the real disadvantage of this development is that many rural areas become empty with fewer economy activities, with many older people and pensioners being left. As a result, many rural municipalities do not receive tax from young workers and business activities, which could leads to abandoned infrastructure and shop closure. Another grave disadvantage is that many elderly are not sufficiently looked after by their children who study and work in urban areas. In other words, young people working in urban areas highly likely neglect their parents, which could in turn result in depression and anxiety among old people, with some elderly contemplating and committing suicide. this is a well-known fact that suicide risk is higher among elderly in rural areas than in urban areas.

In conclusion, young people are leaving rural areas because of better education opportunity and attractive job career in cities, with economy activities and taxes falling and most elderly being neglected in rural areas.

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These days, more and more young people are moving from rural areas to urban areas to work or attend school. ones for working and studying. This essay will discuss the cogent reasons why this happens and I believe that the advantages of this development are less significant than its disadvantages.

(In an academic essay, never mention your essay. Instead, write a summary sentence of your main point.)

In general, there are two primary reasons why young people are moving to city. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that most well-known universities and colleges are in cities. As a result, young people are forced to relocate to cities. A further solid reason in favour of this is that most large reputable companies are in cities. This is because most young people want to pursue glittering careers and receive six-figure salaries without physical-nature ( wrong phrase) work (missing punctuation)

From an overall perspective, the real disadvantage of this development is that many rural areas become empty with fewer economy activities, with many older people and pensioners being left behind. As a result, many rural municipalities do not receive tax ( wrong form) from young workers and business activities, which could leads ( wrong form) to abandoned infrastructure and shop closure. ( wrong form) Another grave disadvantage is that many elderly are not sufficiently looked after by their children who study and work in urban areas. In other words, young people working in urban areas (missing word) highly likely neglect their parents, which could in turn result in depression and anxiety among old people, with some of them elderly contemplating and committing suicide. this ( wrong punctuation; wrong pronoun) is a well-known fact that suicide risk is higher among elderly in rural areas than in urban areas.

In conclusion, young people are leaving rural areas because of better education opportunity ( wrong form) and attractive job career ( wrong form) in cities, while in rural areas with economy activities and taxes are falling and most elderly are being neglected in rural areas.

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