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Topic: Today more people are overweight than ever before. What is your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. The foremost causes of being obesity are overindulging unhealthy diet and eating habits. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the value of nutritious. This is essay will explore the causes and effects of overweight.

Nowadays, there are many fast food outlets are opened and it is getting more and more around the corner of the world. Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too many calories are burned, and too few calories are burned. Diets that consume too much sugar will change hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many foods such as starches, fruits, but most fructose is derived from added sugar.

Serious harm caused by obesity. For example, appearance becomes heavy when gaining weight out of control, your body will become bulky and ugly. In addition, obesity is also the cause of skin cracking, flaking, sagging. This makes many people feel inferior, losing the opportunity to express themselves in life. Increased risk of gout
According to recent statistics, 50% of gout patients weigh more than 20% of their normal body weight. A gout is a form of a metabolic disorder caused by the deposition of urate salt crystals in joints, causing symptoms of soreness, redness and limited movement. Obesity does not directly cause gout, but obese people are at higher risk of getting it because uric acid levels and body weight are closely related.

Obesity or even being overweight has serious effects on the individual and the society. Both need to take action to examine the causes of this problem and find solutions.

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Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. The foremost causes of being obesity are overindulging unhealthy diet and eating habits. [ 1] Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the value of nutritious value of what they are eating. This is essay will explore the causes and effects of being overweight.

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[ 1]: That sentence kills the whole essay. It belongs in the conclusion, not in the introduction. What you need at the start of the introduction are a couple of general sentences that introduce the topic to the reader and give some background information.

You have some very good ideas in your body paragraphs, but you need to learn how to present them in an essay. The first thing I’d like you to learn is how to write a topic sentence at the start of each body paragraph. A topic sentence is made up of two parts: topic + controlling idea. The topic is the main question being discussed in the essay, and the controlling idea is the particular idea you want to outline in your paragraph. For example in your first body paragraph, the controlling idea is causes/factors/reasons.

Also, you need to use linking words (e.g. Therefore, In addition, However) to connect the ideas in a paragraph.

Another important point to remember is that a body paragraph should follow a general-to-specific structure. That means you start with a general idea, and gradually zoom to specific examples. Do not jump around. Deal with one idea (general to specific) at a time.

Moreover, do not stray off topic. For example, the sentence “Glucose is found in many foods such as starches, fruits, but most fructose is derived from added sugar” is outside the scope of the essay.

With the above points in mind, fix your first body paragraph and post it and the introduction again below.

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I have edited the introduction and the first body. Please help me check it again. Thank so much.

Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating. This is essay will explore the causes and effects of being overweight.


Nowadays, there are many causes effects of being overweight. First of all. Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too many calories are burned, and too few calories are burned. Secondly. Diets that consume too much sugar will change hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many foods such as starches, fruits, but most fructose is derived from added sugar. For example. Sugary drinks will compose us to feel fuller for longer. Therefore, we will continue to load more calories through the liquid. This can lead to weight gain for people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks, tea, milk tea and juice that will have a higher weight than people who don't drink sugary drinks.

Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating. This is essay will explore the causes and effects of being overweight.

(It is bad style to mention your essay in an argumentative or persuasive essay. Do not "announce" to the reader "I am going to tell you about X". Write a thesis statement - that is the answer to the essay question or your main conclusion.


Nowadays, there are many causes effects (ungrammatical) of being overweight. First of all. (That is not a sentence. There is no verb.) Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too many calories are burned, (You contradicted yourself, writing A is true and then A is not true. ) and too few calories are burned. Secondly. (That is not a sentence. There is no verb.) Diets that consume too much sugar will change hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many foods such as starches, fruits, (ungrammatical) but most fructose is derived from added sugar. For example. Sugary drinks will compose (wrong word. Musicians compose music.) us to feel fuller for longer. Therefore, we will continue to load (wrong word. ) more calories through the liquid. This can lead to weight gain for people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks, tea, milk tea and juice that will have a higher weight (You wrote that juice has a higher weight than people) than people who don't drink sugary drinks.

I have written the whole essay again. Help me check it.


Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating.


The cause and effect of obesity caused a health crisis in this century! Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too few calories are burned. Diets that consume too much sugar will change hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many foods such as cherries, mango but most fructose is derived from added sugar. For example. Sugary drinks will make us feel fuller for longer. Therefore, we will continue to load more calories through the liquid. This can lead to weight gain for people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks, and fruit juice that will have a higher weight than people who don't drink sugary drinks.

Serious harm caused by obesity. For example, appearance becomes heavy when gaining weight out of control, your body will become bulky and ugly. In addition, obesity is also the cause of skin cracking, flaking, sagging. This makes many people feel inferior, losing the opportunity to express themselves in life. Increased risk of gout

According to recent statistics, 50% of gout patients weigh more than 20% of their normal body weight. A gout is a form of a metabolic disorder caused by the deposition of urate salt crystals in joints, causing symptoms of soreness, redness and limited movement. Obesity does not directly cause gout, but obese people are at higher risk of getting it because uric acid levels and body weight are closely related.

Obesity or even being overweight has serious effects on the individual and the society. Both need to take action to examine the causes of this problem and find solutions.

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Essay prompt: Today more people are overweight than ever before. What is your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Obesity is one of the most common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating and, as a result gain weight to the point of obesity. (You need to answer the topic question as a thesis statement.)


The cause and effect of obesity caused (It does not make sense: "The cause caused.." The increasing proportions of obese people in populations has caused a global health crisis. The increasing prevalence of obesity ... ) a health crisis in this century! Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too many calories are consumed and too few calories are burned. (You mention "balance" so you must write about both sides of the balance.) Diets that consume (Diets do not eat.) consist of too much sugar will change one's hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in processed foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many naturally sweet foods such as cherries, mango (ungrammatical. Changing the nouns does not change the incorrect grammatical structure.) but most fructose is derived from added sugar. For example. ("For example." is not a sentence. Where is the subject and verb?) Sugary drinks will make us feel fuller for longer. Therefore, we will continue to load more calories through the liquid. (That is not logical. If we feel full longer, we will not drink as much.) This can lead to weight gain for people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks, and fruit juice that will have a higher weight (The relative clause "that will have a higher weight" refers to "fruit juice." Fruit juice is not weightier than people. The sentence is not structured properly. ) than people who don't drink sugary drinks.


This can lead to weight gain in people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks and fruit juice as compared to people who don't drink sugary drinks.


Serious harm caused by obesity. (That is not a sentence. It does not have a finite verb. In a formal essay, do not write fragments of sentences.) For example, appearance becomes heavy when gaining weight out of control, (wrong punctuation. Comma splice error. Read this page: https://www.chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm ) your body will become bulky and ugly. In addition, obesity is also the cause of skin cracking, flaking, sagging. (ungrammatical. The words are ok, but the structure is incorrect. You have made the same mistake as you did in "cherries, mango".) This makes many people feel inferior, losing the opportunity to express themselves in life. Increased risk of gout(That is not a sentence. It does not have a finite verb.)

According to recent statistics, 50% of gout patients with gout weigh more than 20% more than the recommended normal body weight. of their normal body weight. A Gout is a form of a metabolic disorder caused by the deposition of urate salt crystals in joints, causing symptoms of soreness, redness and limited movement. Obesity does not directly cause gout, but obese people are at higher risk of getting it because high uric acid levels and excess body weight are closely related.

Obesity or even being overweight has serious effects on the individual and the society. Both need to take action to examine the causes of this problem and find solutions.(The topic did not ask for actions or solutions.)

Obesity is one of the common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating. This is essay will explore the causes and effects of being overweight.

[ Very good. There is nothing wrong with the last sentence of your introduction. It perfectly outlines the scope of the essay.]

Nowadays, there are many causes effects of being overweight.

[ Let’s just stop here and think of some of the causes of obesity in the modern world. List them in point form below. Do not worry too much about the grammar for now. Just think of as many reasons for obesity as you can. What makes people become fat?]

I have edited it. Help me check it one more time.


Obesity is one of the most common and serious diseases in the world. It affects people regardless of race, age or gender. Many people just eat whatever they like without concern about the nutritious value of what they are eating and, as a result, gain weight to the point of obesity.
Nowadays, there are many causes of being overweight. Obesity is caused by an energy imbalance - too many calories are consumed and too few calories are burned. Diets that consist of too much sugar will change one's hormone activity and cause weight gain and obesity. Added sugar in processed foods is half glucose and half fructose. Glucose is found in many naturally sweet foods such as cherries, mango (I don’t know how to edit it. Please help me.) but most fructose is derived from added sugar, for example, Sugary drinks will make us feel fuller for longer. This can lead to weight gain for people who regularly drink sugary drinks like soft drinks than people who don't drink sugary drinks.

Explain why many people are obese because they use processed foods. Studies by nutritionists around the world that explain why Americans are obese show that all processed foods are high in fat. The reason given is due to the use of many artificial substances, so they are one of the causes that have the most considerable impact on obesity.

According to recent statistics, 50% of patients with gout weigh 20% more than the recommended normal body weight. Gout is a form of a metabolic disorder caused by the deposition of urate salt crystals in joints, causing symptoms of soreness, redness and limited movement. Obesity does not directly cause gout, but obese people are at higher risk of getting it because high uric acid levels and excess body weight are closely related.

Obesity or even being overweight has serious effects on individuals and society. Therefore, it is necessary to have diet and exercise to limit obesity.

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