The line graph gives information about the number of people playing four different kinds of sports (basketball, tennis, badminton and rugby) in a certain area from 1985 to 2005.

Overall, tennis and rugby showed a contrary trend in the number of people playing, while those of badminton and basketball remained unchanged over the years.

Starting at approximately 225 thousand of people in 1985, the number of people participating in rugby gradually decreased to 200 thousand in 1990 before its dramatic dip to merely 50 thousand of players in 2005. Having a smaller number of people in 1985, with 150 thousand people, tennis, in contrast, showed a considerable climb to over 200 thousand people playing.

Meanwhile, the number of people playing badminton was nearly unchanged over the years, with about 50 thousand of players. A little higher than badminton, similarly, the number of badminton players stood at 75 thousand in 1985 and remained until 2005.

The line graph __gives information about the number of people playing__ **[ 1]** four different kinds of sports (basketball, tennis, badminton and rugby) in a certain area from 1985 to 2005.

Overall, tennis and rugby showed ~~a contrary~~ **had opposite** trend**s** in the number of people playing **those sports**, while **the numbers of** those ~~of~~ **who played** badminton and basketball remained unchanged over **those two decades.** ~~the years.~~

Starting at approximately 225 thousand ~~of~~ **[ 2]** people in 1985, the number of people participating in rugby gradually decreased to 200 thousand in 1990 before its dramatic dip to merely 50 thousand **[ 2] **~~of~~ players in 2005. ~~Having~~ **Starting with** a smaller number of **[ 3]** ~~people~~ **participants/players** **(150 thousand)** in 1985, ~~with 150 thousand people,~~ **the graph representing** tennis, in contrast, ~~showed~~ **experienced** a **steady but** considerable climb to over 200 thousand people playing **that sport in 2005**.

Meanwhile, the number of people playing badminton was ~~nearly~~ **basically/practically** unchanged over **that 20-year period,** ~~the years,~~ with about 50 thousand ~~of~~ **[ 2]** players. A little higher than badminton, similarly, the number of ~~badminton~~ **[ 4]** **basketball** players stood at 75 thousand in 1985 and remained **at that level** until 2005.

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**[ 1]: What you wrote is not wrong, but consider also:**

“**The line graph outlines the change in the number of individuals who participated in ...”**

**[ 2]: Note no “of”.**

**[ 3]: “people” is not wrong, but it’s better to use a synonym to avoid repetition.**

**[ 4]: That’s silly mistake to make. You should ALWAYS go over your work before submitting it.**

Oh, thank you very much. That's very helpful.

You wrote 154 words. That is over the minimum, but you should write a little more to be on the safe side.

Learn to use __numbers__ (ratios, percentages, or fractions) to describe __changes in values__ rather than words such as "dramatic" "considerable" "precipitous" which are not at all precise or scientific. This description is for a university lecturer, so your writing needs to be at a higher academic level.

Learn to group categories together.

The line graph~~ gives information about~~ *(That is very very vague. The only time I write "give information about" is when there are multiple figures, each of which gives a different aspect of a data set. But I define exactly what data is in each of them.) ***plots / compares / gives / provides / shows*** *the number of people playing four different kinds of sports (basketball, tennis, badminton and rugby) in a certain area from 1985 to 2005.

Overall, tennis and rugby showed **opposite trends** ~~a contrary trend in the number of people playing~~, *("A trend is ONE trend." There are two different, opposite trends.) *while those of badminton and basketball remained

**relatively constant**

**The total number of people in all these sports declined about 20%, from a little over half a million, to just under four hundred thousand, all of which is attributed to rugby.**

Starting at approximately 225 thousand of people in 1985, the number of people participating in rugby gradually decreased to 200 thousand in 1990 before its ~~dramatic~~ dip **by three-quarters **to ~~merely~~ 50 thousand of players in 2005. Having a smaller number of people in 1985, with 150 thousand people, tennis, in contrast, showed ~~a considerable~~ climb **of 75 thousand, or fifty percent, **to over 200 thousand~~ people playing~~.

Meanwhile, the number of people playing badminton was nearly unchanged over the years, with about 50 thousand of players. A ~~little higher~~ *( 50,000 + 1/2 * 50,000 = 75,000. Fifty percent higher is not "a little higher) * **With about 50% more** than badminton, similarly, the number of badminton players **began** ~~stood~~ at 75 thousand in 1985 and **had very little variation.** ~~remained until 2005~~.

AlpheccaStarsOverall, tennis and rugby showed

opposite trends~~a contrary trend in the number of people playing~~,("A trend iswhile those of badminton and basketball remainedONEtrend." There are two different, opposite trends.)relatively constant~~unchanged~~over the years.The total number of people in all these sports declined about 20%, from a little over half a million, to just under four hundred thousand, all of which is attributed to rugby.

I don't understand about the last sentence so much.

"**The total number of people in all these sports declined about 20%" **

Only the number of people playing rugby declined, why do you write "in all these sports"? Can you explain why? Do I misunderstand the meaning?

Lom NguyenI don't understand about the last sentence so much.

In 1985, there were (in thousands) 225 in rugby, 50 in badminton, 75 in basketball and 150 in tennis. Assuming that the groups are exclusive, you can sum up these numbers, you get 500 thousand, which is half a million. That is the total of all the players of all four sports.

In 2005, the total was 400 thousand. Twenty percent of 500 is 100. The total declined by 100, or 20%.

And that total decline, 100 thousand, is due to one of the four sports, rugby.

Oh, I get it. Thank you very much