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Task 2: Some people think that the movies should be for entertainment only, while others believe that media should have educational values.Discuss both news and give your own opinions.

Whether the movie is a method of recreation or an invaluable source of education is a controversial issue. Therefore, in this essay, I will clarify both sides of this matter.

On the one hand, it is advocated that movies yield immense values in the field of entertainment which is always the focus of concerns from billion of people around the world. To commence with, social networks becomes increasingly indispensable to spiritual life which means that were each individual to possess some means like smartphone or laptop, they would be able to relax with many a film website, temporarily escape from the afflictions, especially in a society where people are overwhelmed and overloaded at work. Moreover, through these entertainment demands, they would spur the economic potential, which could be exemplified in the Indian film industry with about 3.5 billion tickets sold every year.

However, the impact of movies on education is also not negligible, notably with children. This is because, for instance, regardless of the type of films they watch, it is reportedly easy for children to unconsciously imitate the behaviors in the movies. Whereby, the messages and meanings inferred from the films would be wholly conveyed to its audience. Additionally, people who relieve themselves to watch foreign films reinforce their foreign language capability. Likewise, a movie has considerable appeal compared to the texts full of words, hence, people tend to be more inclined to learn through direct observation.

In conclusion, from my perspective, movies are truly helpful in supplying knowledge as well as entertainment, that both of which play an irreplaceable role in today’s society.

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Quỳnh Ngân NguyễnWhether the movie is a method of recreation or an invaluable source of education is a controversial issue.

That is quite bad. It is a memorized response. Do not use the same formulaic opening sentence for IELTS essays.

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Quỳnh Ngân NguyễnTherefore, in this essay, I will clarify both sides of this matter.

That is quite unimpressive too.

You need to answer the essay prompt as a thesis statement.


Here is the essay prompt, but you did not copy it correctly.

Discuss both news and give your own opinions.

You need to write a sentence showing that you understand the task. Then you need to write a thesis statement answering : What is your opinion?

e.g. Here is a high-scoring first paragraph.

Some people go to the cinema only to relax, unwind and be entertained. Other people believe that every film can have educational content, and also be thoroughly enjoyable. I agree with them, and producers should be encouraged to include facts about history, science or other subjects along with the fantasy.

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On the one hand, it is advocated that (awkward, These passive-voice dummy-it clauses are quite ugly) movies yield immense values in the field of entertainment which is always the focus of concerns (That makes no sense. What are billions of people worried about?) is their cworry?) from billion of people around the world. To commence with, social networks becomes increasingly indispensable (That is not the topic. The topic is about cinema, not social networking. ) to spiritual life which means that were each individual to possess some means like smartphone or laptop, they would be able to relax with many a film website, temporarily escape from the afflictions, especially in a society where people are overwhelmed and overloaded with at work. Moreover, through these entertainment demands, they would spur the economic potential, which could be exemplified in the Indian film industry with about 3.5 billion tickets sold every year. (The topic is not the economic value of the film industry. This is off-topic. )

(The first paragraph is 80% off topic. There is very little text that relates to going to a cinema for entertainment purposes. Most examiners will ignore it.)

However, the impact of movies on education is also not negligible, (That is also off-topic) notably with children. This is because, for instance, regardless of the type of films they watch, it is reportedly easy for children to unconsciously imitate the behaviors in the movies. (Off topic) Whereby, the messages and meanings inferred from the films would be wholly conveyed to its audience. Additionally, people who relieve themselves (wrong vocabulary - "to relieve oneself" has a totally different meaning.) to watch foreign films reinforce their foreign language capability. Likewise, a movie has considerable appeal compared to the texts full of words, (Comma splice error) hence, people tend to be more inclined to learn through direct observation. (That is also off-topic)

In conclusion, from my perspective, movies are truly helpful in supplying knowledge as well as entertainment, (Comma splice error) that both of which play an irreplaceable role in today’s society.


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