Hello. I'm a Japanese man, and I am planning to study abroad. This is my first time to post my essay here.

I would be most grateful if you could point out and correct errors of grammar, expression, logic, and so on, in my essay.

I wrote this essay for TOEFL, so please take it into account. (At the last exam, I scored 18 out of 30 in the writing section.)
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"Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other peoplerefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer?
Use pecific reasons and examples to support your answer."

When considering the place to eat food, some people like to eat out at restaurants,while others prefer to eat at home. I support the latter idea, for it is more economical. My answer is based on the following two points.

 Firstly, we can cut cost for diet by preparing by ourselves. In general, dishes at restaurant are more expensive than those cooked at home. Various costs such as maintenance cost and labor cost are required to serve dishes at restaurants, and these inevitable factors make the price higher. On the other hand, when preparing food at home, we can compare supermarkets to pursue and purchase more inexpensive materials such as vegetables and meat. Moreover, we don’t need to pay such maintenance cost and labor cost. Therefore, it is more economical to prepare and eat at home.

 Next, we can limit our expenditure for seeing a doctor. If we continue to eat out, the risk of diabetes or other diseases become higher, for foods served at restaurants tends to be contained with a lot of salt and fat. We feel delicious when we eat oily food. Restaurants try to serve delicious food. Then, it is unhealthy to eat out. Therefore, if we eat at home and keep ourselves healthy, we can keep down medical care cost. Furthermore, we can choose materials by our own, which enable us to choose safer ones. Thus, by preparing and eating at home, we can keep ourselves healthy, and can cut cost for medical care.

 In conclusion, if we prepare and eat food at home, it is more economical because we can make a selection of more reasonable foods, and we can keep down cost for seeing a doctor. In Japan, the number of children has decreased, and the number of elderly people has increased. It will be difficult to support the cost for medical by a small working population. Then, Japanese people should try to decrease the cost.

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yellow-submarine "Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other peoplerefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer?

Use pecific reasons and examples to support your answer."

When considering the place to eat food, some people like to eat out at restaurants,while others prefer to eat at home. I support the latter idea, for it is more economical. My answer is based on the following two points.

 Firstly, we can cut cost for diet by preparing by ourselves. In general, dishes at restaurant are more expensive than those cooked at home. Various costs such as maintenance cost and labor cost are required to serve dishes at restaurants, and these inevitable factors make the price higher. On the other hand, when preparing food at home, we can compare the prices supermarkets to pursue and purchase more inexpensive materials such as vegetables and meat. Moreover, we don’t need to pay such maintenance cost and labor cost. Therefore, it is more economical to prepare and eat at home.

 Next, we can limit our expenditure for seeing a doctor. If we continue to eat out, the risk of diabetes or other diseases become higher, for foods served at restaurants tends to be contained with a lot of salt and fat. We feel delicious when we eat oily food. Restaurants try to serve delicious food. Then, it is unhealthy to eat out. Therefore, if we eat at home and keep ourselves healthy, we can keep down medical care cost. Furthermore, we can choose materials by our own, which enable us to choose safer ones. Thus, by preparing and eating at home, we can keep ourselves healthy, and can cut cost for medical care. (odd way to put it)

 In conclusion, if we prepare and eat food at home, it is more economical because we can make a better selection of more reasonable foods, and we can keep down cost for seeing a doctor. In Japan, the number of children has decreased, and the number of elderly people has increased. It will be difficult to support the cost for medical care by a small working population. Then, Japanese people should try to decrease the cost. (odd conclusion)
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ESSAY TOPIC:CHILDREN SHOULD NOT HAVE TO WORK OR HELP WITH HOUSE HOLD TASKS;THEIR ONLY RESPOSIBILITY SHOULD BE TO STUDY.

In this competative world, children know all thi thing not only got high rank. However study is importand criteria for profession but we can not ignore importance of household tasks. Every thing has two side positive and negative. Household tasks have also some minor negative point but its positive point overtake negative point. Children are those who are growing well with thier family. Children copy that work which they show in their house. This is experience and "Experience is the key for Success".
I am disagree with this point that children onlu resposibilty should be to study but children also help with house hold tasks. In this world experience work have great key. If you have only theoritical knowledge not practical knowledge then you will loose job and many more. By doing household task we keep our mind fresh and this fresh mind will help in doing study well. If you can study only not do any activity then your mind will be working stop and you feel as bothering. If you do some house hold task with your study it help. However more household task give affect to study as well as body but house hold tasks has many advantage. Household tasks provide some physical exercise so children become strong. It also provide knowledge by how to this work? Like you are working garden task then you know that how much water require for certaion crop and what are names of crop and how they look like? By doing household tasks children growth become natural but with only study children growth become artificial. In my childhood,I was doing study as well as help to my mother in cooking. By cooking i improve my skill in doing perfect like how many ingredient required,what is their amout? When I become young this skill very useful to me in my microbiology study beceuce this subject also required perfection. There are many examples in which household tasks directly or indeirectly useful. We see many karate movie of ku-fu movie in which master teaches his fellow by doing some household tasks like by cleanig floor, to make chapatti, to clean glass by some special technique. By this way fallow achive strong muscles which can defence from attack.
I am agree with that point study is important but we can not negosiate the usefullness of household tasks. It advantage are useful in study as well as in daily routine.So I am totally disagree with that pont that children not help or work house hold tasks,
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Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat
food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people prefer to eat food at restaurants. They think that time will be saved and one can do other things. While others like to prepare food at home. As far as I am concerned, it is better to have food at home. Among the volume of reasons, I would like to mention few of them down below.

Firstly, you can save the money if you eat at home than eating food outside. Normally, restaurants are for business purpose so they take more money on the same food you cook at home. This is the waste of money .To save the money you can prefer to prepare meal at home with less money.

Secondly, home cooked meals are healthier than meals from the restaurants and I strongly value my health. Meals prepared at restaurants are surely delicious. They include a lot of salt, oil and sugar. Over consumption of such ingredients can have a serious effect on our health and can even lead to chronic illness. When I cook myself at home I can limit those ingredients that are harmful for my health.it is true that my meal may not taste good as restaurants but my health becomes better for longer time.

Thirdly, preparing food makes me independent. I could not rely on restaurants, food stands or other members of home for lunch, dinner or breakfast. I can make a food of my choice at any time when I get hungry. Also, preparing food at home may improve one’s cooking skills.

Finally, having food out is comfortable but one can lose money, health, independency and new technique to cook food.