Topic: “Social networking is damaging teenagers’ social skills.” To what extent do you agree with this statement? Write an essay of at least 200 words to support your ideas.

Some people say that social networking is damaging teenagers’ social skills. I completely agree with this statement. Nowadays, era 4.0 develops, this means that social networking is growing day by day.

First, social networking prevents teenagers from communicating with the outside world. Social media makes people stay at home more, the communicative skill is gradually lost. For example, if you stay at home only to surf Facebook for a long time, you will not want to go outside and communicate with everybody.

Second, listening skills are also damaged by social networking. Social media such as Facebook, Youtube make people leave the outside life and not know how to listen to others. Listening skills play an important part in our society, you can receive a lot of advice, information and also gain the trust of others.

Third, not only harms social networking listening skills but also harms teenagers’ respect skills. Social media makes people left out, only think for themself. The respect is gradually lost, people are easily angry and bad-tempered. Respect skills, which are one of the most important skills one must have, can help you make friends and succeed in studying.

In conclusion, the more developed era 4.0, the more damaged social networking. Social skills such as listening, communicating, or respect are gradually harmed more by social media.

Some people say that social networking is damaging teenagers’ social skills. I completely agree with this statement. Nowadays, era 4.0 develops, (That makes no sense at all. "era 4.0" is a music album released by the French gothic metal band Penumbra.) this means that social networking is growing day by day. (Delete the last sentence. It does not belong here. End the paragraph with your thesis statement.)

First, social networking prevents (wrong word) teenagers from communicating with the outside world. (That makes no sense. Does it lock them up in a cave or prison?) Social media makes people stay at home more, (comma splice error ) the communicative their communication skills are gradually lost. For example, if you stay at home only to post on your surf Facebook page for hours and hours, a long time, you will not want to go outside and communicate with everybody.

Second, listening skills are also damaged by social networking. Social media such as Facebook, Youtube (Ungrammatical. Missing conjunction) make people leave the outside life and not know how to listen to others. Listening skills play an important part in our society, (comma splice error ) you can receive a lot of advice, information (Ungrammatical. Missing conjunction) and also gain the trust of others.

Third, (Missing subject - what is the subject of "harms"?) not only harms social networking listening skills (not a good phrase. It means that you learn to listen via social media.) but also harms teenagers’ respect skills. (wrong phrase) Social media makes people left out, only think for themself. The respect is gradually lost, (comma splice error ) people are easily angry and bad-tempered. Respect skills, (wrong phrase) which are one of the most important skills one must have, can help you make friends and succeed in studying.

In conclusion, the more developed era 4.0, the more damaged social networking. (How does a music album damage social networking web sites?) Social skills such as listening, communicating, or respect (wrong expression) are gradually harmed more by social media.


You main writing issues.

1. You make a lot of comma splice errors. Study this page: https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

2. You make lists of items without a conjunction.

Wrong: Our flag is red, yellow.
Right: Our flag is red and yellow.

Wrong: My favorite websites are Facebook, Youtube.
Right: My favorite websites are Facebook and Youtube.

Wrong: You can get advice, information here.
Right: You can get advice and information here.

Wrong: People on social media are often rude, insulting.
Right: People on social media are often rude and insulting.

3. Era 4.0 is not a widely-understood term. Do not use it.

4. There are unnatural expressions and word usage.

Respect is not a skill. You need to write sentences like this:

Social networking teaches teenagers to be rude and disrespectful of others.
Teenagers who use social media a lot lose their respect for their parents and teachers. They become disobedient, confrontational and impolite.