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Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, belive that school is the place to learn this.

Because of the different views of people in the society, there are a lot of problems having been made. One of them is the disagreement about how to educate our children to be good members of society. Some of them say that the responsibility of the issue is due to parents. In the other hand, others think the duty is placed in school which their children are following. In my opinion, there are some agreements and disagreements when discussing about this problem.

You can see that two statements mentioned in the previous paragraph are both right, but not enough. As you can know, in the developed society, one thing and the others are bonded together and placed in chains. Educating a child is not excepted from that. If you want the personality of your child developed in the positive way, you should not give all the duties to the education system in school. Being as their children, you should spend your time to know your child obviously. So that you and teachers could lead your child to walk on the right road, help them to develop their perception, skills and knowledge, or at least you could change and remove the negative thoughts from them.

Teaching children to be good members in society is one of the most hardships in your life. To do that, the association between parents and school is extremely important. If one of two factors were not effective, the children would not have a well train to be a good person.

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Because of the different views of people in the society, there are a lot of problems having been made. (ungrammatical. Also, I do not understand how this sentence relates to the topic of teaching children to be good people. ) One of them is the disagreement about how to educate our children to be good members of society. Some of them say that the responsibility of the issue is due to the parents'. In the other hand, others think the duty is placed in school which their children are following. (wrong phrase. Children study in school. Children go to school. We do not say "Children follow school.") In my opinion, there are some agreements and disagreements when discussing about this problem.

That says absolutely nothing. There are disagreements and agreements on every possible subject or statement in the universe. When you write your opinion for this essay, be explicit and say one of these:

In my opinion, it is the parents who should teach their children good citizenship.
In my opinion, it is the school teachers who should teach all the children good citizenship together.
In my opinion, the parents and the school teachers should be equally responsible for teaching the children good citizenship.
In my opinion, the parents have to be in charge of teaching their children proper behaviour, but the school teachers should include good citizenship in their lessons.

You can see that two statements mentioned in the previous paragraph are both right, but not enough. (Do not mention your writing in your essay. Just write about the topic you are given.) As you can know, in the developed society, one thing and the others are bonded together and placed in chains. (That is not good English. I don't know what you mean.) Educating a child is not excepted from that. If you want the personality of your child developed in the positive way, you should not give all the duties to the education system in school. Being as their children, (You are not the child of your children. That does not make any sense.) you should spend your time to know your child obviously. So that you and teachers could lead your child to walk on the right road, (??) help them to develop their perception, (wrong word) skills and knowledge, or at least you could change and remove the negative thoughts from them. (The topic is not about personality or skills or knowledge or negative thoughts. It is about behaviour - being a good member of society. Can you give examples of a good citizen and a bad citizen? )

Teaching children to be good members in society is one of the most hardships (wrong word) in your life. To do that, the association between parents and school is extremely important. If one of two factors (wrong word) were not effective, the children would not have a well train (A train is a vehicle that runs on tracks.) to be a good person.