I wrote this essay last night and I know I shift tense a lot, just don't know what to correct any more. Please help me if you have time. Thank you

"Save the Last Dance 2" is a movie that depicted a young girl who has always dreamed of becoming a famous ballerina dancer since she was a little kid. In order for her dream to become reality, Sara has put tremendous time and effort to reach her dream. After high school, she got accepted to Juilliard School which is one of the world's premier performing arts conservatories located in New York City. As she became a famous ballerina dancer, she later discovered another dance style called "Hip-Hop" with the help of Miles Sultuana. She then realized that her life is not just about ballet and she has been perfecting someone else's step instead of defining her own.
I believe in today's society, music has a huge impact on teenagers, especially hip-hop and rap. While watching the movie, I found Candy's dancing style was distracting and unpleasant to watch because she keeps on sticking her chest out while battling with Sara. Although the song lyrics say "stick your chest out, roll it on the ground" I did not believe it was necessary to follow exactly what the lyrics said. If Candy is a creative dancer, she should not enforce those kinds of moves. I felt that most hip-hop and rap music is a bad choice for teenagers to listen to because most of them talk about sex, girls, money, and drugs which may lead to sexual activity, violence, and bad behavior. Hip-hop and rap not only influence the way teenagers act but also the way they dress.
I saw a couple of break dancing moves in the movie that I thought were great. One of the dancers did a pose by positioning his body upside down with his hands pushing his body up and his legs curved on the side. That move requires a lot of strength. Another dancer did a head spin move which I thought was also great. He started out slowly and suddenly increased his speed by twisting his legs together and put a quick spin on his legs. This dancing style was very popular in the late nineties. I remember when I was in middle school, a lot of kids including myself were practicing break dance to battle with another kid or crew. Not only was it fun to practice but it also helped us to strengthen our bodies and be more agile.
Dancing is one of the most difficult, disciplined, and beautiful art forms. Not to say other dancing styles are not difficult but out of all the dancing styles in the movie, I thought ballet is truly the most difficult type of dance to accomplish. Classical ballet takes a lot of strength and agility and yet it is supposed to look simple. I thought the last performance that Sara performed at Juilliard was the best ballet in the movie. The performance, costumes, dim lighting, and music were perfect. The costumes that the ballerinas wear is perfectly fitting them because it does not get in their way while performing and it warms their muscles to help them work more efficiently.
I think ballet seems to click when all elements like costumes, scenery, and the way it is filmed come together. I thought the music, dim lighting, costumes, performance, audiences, and the ambience that were there when Sara performed her ballet dance at Juilliard was perfect. Dancing took not only dancers to complete the piece. But it took choreographers, lighting designers and operators, musicians, and many other talented people who almost never get the recognition they deserve to complete the piece. Ballet was not only an art but I felt it was trying to tell a story which many dancing styles lack.
I usually don't watch this kind of movie but "Save the Last Dance 2" is definitely a movie I would rent again and I recommend to those who love, dislike, or are clueless about dancing to watch this movie so they know how much sacrifice and dedication the dancers devoted their time to master the art. I felt that the movie is appropriate for almost all ages except for the intimate bedroom love scene between the two lead characters which was unnecessary. Other than that, there is no harsh or foul language. I enjoyed the movie very much and plan on renting the original "Save the Last Dance" to compare the two. I wanted to know more about Mile and Sara's past so I thought the movie was kind of short.
Sara has lost her mom when tragedy strike but she has not given up her dream to become a famous ballerina. She continued to pursue her dream and discovered another art that she loved dearly and does not know which way to turn then she realized that she cannot live without both. People have different reasons to why they dance; some may dance to help co-ordination, strength, stamina, flexibility, balance, etc…, dancing does mostly benefit you. By dancing, you may meet lots of people from different walks and find out more about other people's culture other than your own. Dancing is not for everyone but if you devote your time and effort into anything you love, you definitely will be rewarded at the end.
cool, it's really a good article about 'save the last dance', I have never seen the movie, but I will try to rent one next time, thank you for introduce me such a good movie, it must take me into an all new feeling about the culture about Dancing I believe. Personally, your article is good enough, I afraid I can not geive any advice to you, maybe native speakers will give some suggestion about it.

English learner from china.
I've highlighted a few things for you to fix. I'm not sure what you're trying to say in your essay. If this is a movie review, then you should focus on the movie and not dancing in general.
mountainI wrote this essay last night and I know I shift tense a lot, just don't know what to correct any more. Please help me if you have time. Thank you

"Save the Last Dance 2" is a movie that depicted a young girl who has always dreamed of becoming a famous ballerina dancer since she was a little kid. In order for her dream to become reality, Sara has put tremendous time and effort to reach her dream. After high school, she got accepted to Juilliard School in New York city, which is one of the world's premier performing arts conservatories located in New York City. As she became a famous ballerina dancer, she later discovered another dance style called "Hip-Hop" with the help of Miles Sultuana. She then realized that her life is not just about ballet and she has been perfecting someone else's step instead of defining her own.

I believe in today's society, music has a huge impact on teenagers, especially hip-hop and rap. While watching the movie, I found Candy's dancing style was distracting and unpleasant to watch because she keeps on sticking her chest out while battling with Sara. Although the song lyrics say "stick your chest out, roll it on the ground" I did not believe it was necessary to follow exactly what the lyrics said. If Candy is a creative dancer, she should not try those kinds of moves. I felt that most hip-hop and rap music is a bad choice for teenagers to listen to because most of them talk about sex, girls, money, and drugs which may lead to sexual activity, violence, and bad behavior. Hip-hop and rap not only influence the way teenagers act but also the way they dress. (not related to the review)
I saw a couple of break dancing moves in the movie that I thought were great. One of the dancers did a pose by positioning his body upside down with his hands pushing his body up and his legs curved on the side. That move requires a lot of strength. Another dancer did a head spin move which I thought was also great. He started out slowly and suddenly increased his speed by twisting his legs together and put a quick spin on his legs. This dancing style was very popular in the late nineties. I remember when I was in middle school, a lot of kids including myself were practicing break dance to battle with another kid or crew. Not only was it fun to practice but it also helped us to strengthen our bodies and be more agile.