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Write about the following topic.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 254 words.


In recent days, there is an increasing tendency that customers are gravitated toward purchasing more items comprising books, tickets, and groceries on the internet than before. In my vantage point, this trend may bring about both pros and cons.

To begin with, the cyber commercial is implied to be a convenient and time-saving choice. It is obvious that shopping online will lend a useful hand to those who are so busy that cannot come to the store. With just a click, the purchasers can get everything they need and the products will be sent to them promptly. For instance, Shopee nowadays meet buyers’ demand with immeasurable goods categories and free-shipping to facilitate transactions. Moreover, thanks to this way of shopping, people can also compare the prices among various sellers to opt for the best product with the most decent cost.

On the contrary, shopping online sometimes brings adversities. Online customers may come up against cyber scammers if they are inadvertent. When advertising commodities in the internet, some cunning traders just display prominent sides of their product despite the fact that these goods are untrustful. Especially, during this covid-19 pandemic, more and more crimes introduce substandard medical items to deceive gullible buyers, so the clients need to consider carefully. Furthermore, with the advent of shopping online, conventional boutiques have big difficulty in competing with online stores, withal. These small entrepreneurs, consequently, will confront a colossal loss in revenue or even go bankrupted, in the worst circumstances.

In brief, although this kind of shopping may leave a few demerits, its merits are still considerable. I myself assert that its advantageous facets overwhelm the negative ones.

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In recent days, (Actually, it's been going on for nearly a decade, not just a few days!) With your present tense verb, there is no need for these redundant prepositional phrases.) there is an increasing tendency for that customers are gravitated (wrong verb form. The passive voice is incorrect.) toward purchasing (There is too much repetition here. "increasing tendency" and "gravitate toward" are overlapping in meaning. That really is like triple sugar-coating a donut.) to go online to purchase more items comprising books, tickets, and groceries on the internet than before. In my vantage point, this trend may bring about both pros and cons.


OK. Here is the essay prompt. Did you read it?

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Here is your answer:

In my vantage point, this trend may bring about both pros and cons.

Did you answer the prompt? Really? Did you inform me, the reader, if the benefits that I reap from online shopping more than compensate for all the difficulties I might encounter?

No, you did not.

And the prompt did not ask "from you viewpoint" or "in your opinion". The topic is not about the trend, but the transaction (buying). So you quite missed the mark with your thesis statement.

Even native speakers with perfect grammar and immense vocabularies get low scores when they do not adequately address the essay prompt.



To begin with, the cyber commercial (The topic is not about advertising at all.) is implied to be (I do not understand this. Who implies this? It is not in the task. ) a convenient and time-saving choice. It is obvious that shopping online will lend a useful hand be useful for to those who are so busy that cannot come (ungrammatical. This verb needs a subject) to the store. With just a click, the purchasers can get everything they need and the products will be sent to them promptly. For instance, Shopee (What is "Shoppee?") nowadays meet (wrong form) buyers’ demand (wrong form) with immeasurable a wide assortment / variety of goods categories and free-shipping (wrong form) to facilitate transactions. Moreover, thanks to this way of shopping, people can also compare the prices among various sellers to opt for the best product with the most reasonable decent cost.

On the contrary, shopping online sometimes brings difficulties / problems. adversities. Online customers may come up against cyber scammers if they are not paying very close attention to the security icon on the address line. inadvertent. (wrong word) When advertising products commodities (wrong word) in (wrong word) the internet, some cunning traders deceive prospective buyers about the features and quality just display prominent sides (wrong expression) of their product despite the fact that these goods are untrustful. Especially, during this the covid-19 pandemic, more and more crimes introduce substandard or ineffective medical items are peddled to deceive gullible buyers, so the clients need to consider carefully. people need to be very cautious and do their research. Furthermore, with the advent (wrong word) increasing popularity of shopping online, conventional boutiques have big difficulty in competing with online stores, withal. These small entrepreneurs, consequently, will confront a colossal loss in revenue or even go bankrupted, (wrong form) in the worst circumstances.

In brief, although this kind of shopping may leave a few issues for the consumer demerits, (wrong word ) its merits are still considerable. I myself assert that its advantageous facets (wrong word) overwhelm the negative ones.

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Thanks so much for your feedback. This is my edited introduction:

In the modern era, shopping online has revolutionized the way people buy things. There is an increasing tendency for customers to go online to purchase more books, tickets, and groceries than ever before. This leads to both pros and cons, but the advantages will be dominant.

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In the modern era, (That phrase has no real meaning. It is only detracting. The present perfect tense is all you need to set the time frame.)

Shopping online has revolutionized the way people buy things. There is an increasing tendency for customers to go online to purchase more books, tickets, and groceries than ever before. Although there are some risks, they are easy to circumvent and clearly This leads to both pros and cons, but the advantages are significant. will be dominant.