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  • Requirement: The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
  • My essay:

The given table gives information about the percentages of income that residents in five European countries spend on four different categories off products and services every month.


The largest percentages of expenditure go on food and drink, and housing. In contrast, European citizens spend a lower proportion off toatal spending on clothing and entertainment.


The monthly income spend on housing was significantly higher in the UK, Germany and France, ranging from 31% to 37%, than in any of the other countries. Turkey has the highest pecentage of expenditure on food and drink each month, at 36%, which is opposed to Germany (at 22%).


The amounts of money, as a percentage of income, citizens spend on clothing and entertainment are lower. The average proportion of income that residents spend on entertainment only ranges from 10% to 19%. The percentage of expenditure on clothing is slightly lower, at under 15%. French and Spanish spend only 7% and 8% of their wages on clothing, respectively.

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The given table gives information about (That is very vague. "Information about" can be almost anything. Be exact. What is in the table?) the percentages of income that residents in five European countries (What are the countries?) spend on four different categories off (wrong word) products and services every month. (What are these categories?)


Model Paragraph:

The table shows the percentage of monthly income expended on each of four budget categories (food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment ) for families in five European countries (France, Germany, the UK, Turkey and Spain).


The largest percentages of expenditure go to on food and drink, and housing. (Synonyms: meals and accommodation.) In contrast, European citizens (incorrect. The table does not include every European country.) spend a lower proportion off (wrong word) toatal spending on clothing and entertainment.


In the "overall" paragraph, give 2 or 3 most important observations:

Overall, the highest percentages are allocated to meals and accommodation, with much less going to clothing and entertainment. Housing is relatively more costly in France, Germany and the UK in comparison with Turkey and Spain. The French and Spanish devote relatively modest proportions of their income to clothing (7-8%).

In the next paragraph, record some interesting details.

Meals take from a little under a quarter to a bit over a third of monthly income, with the Turks having the highest outlays, at 36%, in contrast with the Germans, who spend only 22%. Housing averages over 30% in France, Germany and the UK, (31%, 33% and 37%, respectively), in contrast to Turkey (20%) and Spain (18%). Proportions allocated to entertainment range from 10% to 19%, with the Turks having the smallest and Germans the largest.


The proportion of monthly income spent on housing was significantly higher in the UK, Germany and France, ranging from 31% to 37%, than in any of the other countries.(You have not told the reader what these countries are, so the reader is confused.) Turkey has the highest pecentage of expenditure on food and drink each month, at 36%, which is opposed (wrong word) to Germany (at 22%).


The amounts of money, (no comma) as a percentage of income, citizens spend on clothing and entertainment are lower. (Lower than what?) The average proportion of income that residents spend on entertainment only ranges from 10% to 19%. The percentage of expenditure on clothing is slightly lower, at under 15%. French and Spanish people spend only 7% and 8% of their wages on clothing, respectively.


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Thank for your help.

But I am confused about the phrase "be opposed to" I used in my writing and you said "wrong word". I don't know why and how to change it into right. Can you help me explain???

Thank you so much.

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Thank for your help.

But I am confused about the phrase "be opposed to" I used in my writing and you said "wrong word". I don't know why and how to change it into right. Can you help me explain???

Thank you so much.

Turkey has the highest percentage of expenditure on food and drink each month, at 36%, as opposed to which is opposed (wrong word) Germany, the lowest, at 22%.

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