The pie chart gives information about different destinations that Anthony graduates chose after finishing degree course. The table compares the average salaries they got 5 years later among three types of work.

Overall, the majority of graduates had a full-time job after completing their degree course, and the smallest percentage of the total goes to people taking a part-time job and studying. After 5 years’ work, graduates working in the government sector accounted for the largest proportion of people who got the highest salary.

Regarding the pie chart, more than half of the total graduates got a full-time job, at 52%. The respective proportion of part-time employees and unemployees were much lower, at 15% and 12%. The figure for people taking postgraduate study was 8%, which was equal with the unknown group. Just 5% of graduates both had a part-time job and continued to study.

Looking at the table, after 5 years’ work, the number of people who worked in private companies and got salary ranged from 25$ to 49$, was 10%, which doubled the figures of freelance consultants and government sector group. However, a contradictory pattern can be seen at the most generous salary, over 100$. While the percentage of the government sector was half of the total, the figure for private companies was lowest, at 30%. 40% of freelance consultants got over 100$ after working 5 years.

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OMG. I'm so sorry that I typed the word "Anthropology" wrong:(( Please forgive me.

The pie chart gives information about (Do not use "give information about" That is not what is in the pie chart!) different destinations that Anthony graduates chose (Wrong verb. Graduates of a university do not choose to be unemployed, do they?) after finishing degree course. (Incomplete. What are the destinations?) The table compares the average salaries they got 5 have years later among three types of work.

Overall, the majority of graduates had a full-time job after completing their degree course, and the smallest percentage of the total goes to are those who take people taking a part-time job and studying. After 5 five years, ’ work, graduates working in the government sector had, on average, higher salaries. accounted for the largest proportion of people who got the highest salary.

Regarding the pie chart,More than half of the total graduates got a full-time job, at 52%. The respective proportion of part-time employees and unemployees were much lower, at 15% and 12%. The figure (wrong word) for people taking postgraduate study was 8%, which was equal to with the unknown group. Just 5% of graduates both had a part-time job and continued to study.

Looking at the table, after 5 years’ work, the number of people who worked in private companies and got salary ranged from 25$ (wrong form, wrong number) to 49$, was 10%, which doubled (wrong usage) the figures of freelance consultants and government sector group. However, a contradictory (wrong word) pattern can be seen at the most generous salary, over 100$. While the percentage of the government sector was half of the total, the figure for private companies was lowest, at 30%. 40% of freelance consultants got over 100$ after working 5 years. (I do not believe that you understood this table.)

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The pie chart compares the proportions of employment status of Anthropology graduates after finishing their university degree course. The table shows the average salaries Anthropologist had years later while working in government sector, private companies, or working as freelance consultants.

Overall, the majority of graduates had a full-time job after completing their degree course, and the smallest percentage are those who took a part-time job and study. After five years, graduates working in the government sector had, on average, higher salaries.

More than half of the total graduates got a full-time job, at 52%. The proportion of part-time employees and unemployment were much lower, at 15% and 12% respectively. The percentage of people taking postgraduate study was 8%, which was equal to the unknown group. Just 5% of graduates had a part-time job and continued to study.

After 5 years’ work, the number of people who worked in private companies and got salary ranged from $25,000 to $49,999, was 10%, which was double the number of freelance consultants and government sector group. At the most generous salary, over $100,000, while the percentage of the government sector was half of the total, 30% of people working in private companies had this salary. The proportion of freelance consultants who got over $100,000 after working 5 years was 40%.


I worte this essay again base on your suggestion, please review it for me. May I ask you a question? Will my score be lower if I cannot paraphrase the topic in the first paragraph?

taesonssWill my score be lower if I cannot paraphrase the topic in the first paragraph?

You should be able to describe the graphic in your own words. Try not to copy the instructions exactly.

It is more important to combine the different categories for doing the comparisons. It shows that you not only understand the information, but how to make logical combinations.

For example in the pie chart, you can combine the two full-time positions, and the two part-time positions.

In the table, you can combine the two top salary grade groups.

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