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The given chart gives information about the number of people living together in a house( people) in the UK in 1981 and 2001.

It is clear from the chart that there was a minor difference between the figure for people per household by 1981 and 20 years later. However, generally, most people in the UK chose to share accommodations with another person.

According to the chart, 2-person households made up nearly a third of those surveyed in 1981. In contrast, the two lowest figures were for houses with 5 and 6 people, which altogether contribute under a half of 2-person ones. The number of households with a person or 3 and 4 people was significantly higher.


Concerning the year of 2001, there were merely 2 houses where 6 people living together, this data for 5-person was 4 houses higher. Meanwhile, 2-person households ranked first with 34, coming next were houses with a person. The number of houses with 4 and 5 people were nearly equal- with 15 and 17 houses recorded.

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IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

You did not fix the problems I listed in your first post.

Here is a start on the list of phrases and words that you need to fix

1. given (delete)

2. gives information about (vague, imprecise)

3. house( people) - ???

4. It is clear from the chart that (filler, verbose)

5. figure - wrong word.

6. According to the chart, (filler, verbose)


The given chart (What kind of chart? Is it a pie chart?) gives information about (vague, imprecise. Tell the examiner exactly what is plotted.) the number of people living together in a house( people) (A house is not people.) in the UK in 1981 and 2001.


It is clear from the chart that (Verbose. You have already told the reader that there is a chart. Do not repeat it again. Repeated text loses points.) there was a minor difference between the figure (Wrong word. What are the units of measurement here?) for people per household by (wrong word) 1981 and 20 years later. However, generally, most people in the UK chose to share accommodations with another person.

According to the chart, (Repeated) Two-person households made up nearly a third of those surveyed in 1981. In contrast, the two lowest figures were for houses with 5 and 6 people, which altogether contribute under a half of 2-person ones. The number of households with a person or 3 and 4 people was significantly higher. (Higher than what?)


Concerning the year of In 2001, there were merely 2 houses (That is incorrect. You still do not have the units of measure correct,) where 6 people living (ungrammatical) together, this data for 5-person was 4 houses higher. Meanwhile, 2-person households ranked first with 34, (What are the units. Are there only 34 houses in the UK?) coming next were houses with a person. The number of houses with 4 and 5 people were nearly equal- with 15 and 17 houses recorded. (incorrect).


The main error you made on this task was not identifying the figure as a stacked bar chart, and not specifying the data values as percentages. How do I know that these are percentages? First, these cannot be numbers of houses, because London has millions of people and houses. Second, the sum of the numbers in each stacked bar is 100. When all data values sum to 100, you can be pretty sure it is percentages.

This data could have been plotted equally well on two pie charts.

For example, here is the same data for 1981.


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You did not compare the 1981 information very well with the 2001 information. Which categories increased or decreased the most?

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Hello AlpheccaStars, I have known that this post is the same to the previous one but I still repost it because in the last post, I did not attach an image so I think it may be hard for you guys to give me a comment. Hope you can give me some advices to improve my writing. Thank you so much!

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You can just add a comment with the attached image instead of writing a completely new post.

Excellent capitalization!

Also "advice" is non-count. We do not use the plural form.

"Feedback" is a non-count noun and so is "work" and "homework".

"Comment" is a count noun.

Thank you so much for spending your time! Can you suggest me some other ways to say "3-person household"? Thank you

You have a mistaken idea about what the phrase "number of people per household" means.

For example, a two-person household is nearly always a married or unmarried couple living together, a three-person household is most often a couple with one child and a four-person household is a couple with two children. It is quite unusual to have three or four unrelated people to make up a household.

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Hello AlpheccaStars, thank you so much for letting me know this important information.