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Hello!

I'm Nicky.

I wrote this song yesterday. But English is not my native language.

Could somebody look if there any mistakes in this lyric?

Please, Please, Please...

Thank you so much in advance.

Life in a small coastal town
Seems to you life off-stage
Childhood is over and you wait,
Sometimes your life will change.

You save money to buy a gift
To girl, you know from school
She works as a waitress now
You work at the swimming pool.

After work you cuddle together
And go along town street
Leaves flutter in the autumn wind
And as one two hearts beat.

She doesn’t want to leave her home
You want to stay, but you can’t stay
You leave your home town alone
And she says “Please don’t go away”.

You say “I’ll be back very soon”
She promises to wait for you
You work very hard at a new place
You do more then you can do.

Year after year, time goes by
You live your big city life
You have enough money to buy
All, what you want to buy.

Someday you come back to your town
Passing by the same swimming pool
You understand, you lost forever
That girl, you know from school...
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Welcome to EnglishForward!

There are only a few minor mistakes

In the first verse: Sometimes should probably be 'some time'; the meaning is some time in the future. If you use sometimes, it means several times or often in the future.

The second verse: buy a gift for a girl. or give a gift to a girl.

Sixth verse "All that you want to buy."
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I think you mean: You do more than you can do.
Also note that sometime is one word: Sometime your life will change. I would prefer: One/Some day your life will change. Some time is two words if it means "a little time": Give me some time.
CB
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Old Man Gordon Welcome to EnglishForward!

There are only a few minor mistakes

In the first verse: Sometimes should probably be 'some time'; the meaning is some time in the future. If you use sometimes, it means several times or often in the future.

The second verse: buy a gift for a girl. or give a gift to a girl.

Sixth verse "All that you want to buy."

Thank You for help. Thank You very much.
Cool Breeze I think you mean: You do more than you can do.
Also note that sometime is one word: Sometime your life will change. I would prefer: One/Some day your life will change. Some time is two words if it means "a little time": Give me some time.
CB

Thank You for useful answer.