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Dear--------

I have attached the remaining documents including the medical questionnaire, copies of the medical results, immigration form, scanned copy of my recent passport-size photograph and a scanned original passport.

I have also sent the requested photographs via D.H.L Express under reference No. 14463550. This package has delivered to your Hotel on 10 March 2013. If you have any further questions, please feel free to contact me.

I look forward to hearing from you

Sincerely,
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This package was delivered to your hotel on 10 March 2013.

Otherwise, Jess, this is perfect.
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Dear --------, (comma needed here)

I have attached the remaining documents including the medical questionnaire, copies of the medical results, the immigration form, a scanned copy suggest scan of my recent passport-size photograph and a scanned suggest scan of my original passport.

I have also sent the requested photographs via D.H.L I think it's just DHL Express under reference No. suggest . The reference number is 14463550. This package has was delivered to your Hotel hotel on 10 March 2013. If you have any further questions, please feel free to contact me.

I look forward to hearing from you. (period needed here)

Sincerely,

In your first list (medical questionnaire, etc) you should not mix items with an article before them (the requested photographs, a scanned passport) with items without an article (immigration form, scanned copy of photograph).

Other marked suggestions and corrections should be self-explanatory.
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