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Most of the countries, it is essential that the government carry out to rebuild the city to progress in economy so that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope to preserve old building.

First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the international popular big city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, Which can make more attractive to tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is the serious problem, constructing big buildings can let more people to live in. Still further, visiting old buildings, tourist would think that is very antiquated is not equally they had expected.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building. They should preserve some old buildings because many people grow up with it. Thus, many people have emotion with it. In addition, if they destroy all old buildings, you could not find any old building about history. When you have got a child, you could not bring him to visit and show the old building where you often went to before or was named building. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist feel more special, which would give tourist more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government has a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry, it has not much people to object. However, at present, many people oppose to destroy the Star Ferry. I hope next time rebuilding that they should to object before finish the consultation. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if where has not many people visit.
Your basic grammar is poor. I suggest you try simpler sentences.
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Most of the countries, it is essential that the government carry out to rebuild the city to progress in economy so that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope to preserve old building.

First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the international popular big city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, Which can make more attractive to tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is the serious problem, constructing big buildings can let more people to live in. Still further, visiting old buildings, tourist would think that is very antiquated is not equally they had expected.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building. They should preserve some old buildings because many people grow up with it. Thus, many people have emotion with it. In addition, if they destroy all old buildings, you could not find any old building about history. When you have got a child, you could not bring him to visit and show the old building where you often went to before or was named building. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist feel more special, which would give tourist more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government has a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry, it has not much people to object. However, at present, many people oppose to destroy the Star Ferry. I hope next time rebuilding that they should to object before finish the consultation. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if where has not many people visit.

I have changed some sentences.I hope someone can correct my grammar.If you don't know the sentence meaning, you should highlight it, please.Thank you for your help.~"~

Like many governments in the world, the Hong Kong government would like to carry out city reform in order to boost the economy, but to achieve this, many old building should pulled down. Hence, many people hope to preserve old building.

First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the cosmopolitan city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, which can have more attractive to make more tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is the serious problem, constructing big buildings which can let more people to live in. And also, tourists visit to in order to see cosmopolitan city instead of antiquated city.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building. They should preserve some old buildings because many people grow up with it and have emotion with it. In addition, if they destroy all old buildings, you could not find any old building about history. When you have got a child, you could not bring him to visit and show the old building where you often been to or was named building. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist feel more special because they think that is advanced, where is not any old building, which would give tourist more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government has a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry, it has not much people to object. However, at present, many people oppose to destroy the Star Ferry. I hope next time rebuilding that they should to object before finish the consultation. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if where has not many people visit.
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1. You need to break up your long sentences. Whenever your sentences get long, you make glaring errors. You can minimize your errors by keeping your sentences very very simple.

2. You tend to leave nouns singular (e.g. building, tourist, etc.).
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Like many governments in the world, the Hong Kong government would like to carry out city reform in order to boost the economy, but to achieve this, many old building should __ pulled down. Hence, many people hope to preserve old building (only 1?).

First of all, it is needless to say that Hong Kong is very small and where is the cosmopolitan city so it has to destroy some old buildings to construct more new buildings such as a big square or a big building, which can have more attractive to make more tourists come to Hong Kong and shopping which will increase commercial profits and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is the serious problem, constructing big buildings which can let more people to live in. And also, tourists visit to in order to see __ cosmopolitan city instead of ___ antiquated city.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all old building (1?). They should preserve some old buildings because many people grow up with it and have emotion with it. In addition, if they destroy all old buildings, you could not find any old building about history. When you have got a child, you could not bring him to visit and show the old building where you often been to or was named building. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist (one?) feel more special because they think that is advanced, where is not any old building, which would give tourist more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government has a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry, it has not much people to object. However, at present, many people oppose to destroy the Star Ferry. I hope next time rebuilding that they should to object before finish the consultation. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building (one?) need to be preserved if where has not many people visit.



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I have changed all sentences

In most countries, it is essential that the government carries out policy of rebuilding the cities in order to progress in economy. This may induce that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope to preserve old buildings.

First of all, it is needless to say that is very small and cosmopolitan city. Therefore it has to destroy some old buildings so that the government can construct more facilities such as big squares or skyscrapers. These activities can create more attraction and attract tourists to visit and shop, which will increase the total revenue and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is one of serious problems in .Constructing big buildings can let more people live in. Besides, tourists visit to in order to see cosmopolitan city instead of antiquated city.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all ancient buildings. They should preserve some ancient buildings because many people grow up with them. Thus, many people have a strong feeling with them. In addition, if they destroy all these constructions, people may not be able to learn about history. If you have children, you could not bring them to visit and show the old buildings where you had often visited before. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist feel special because they think that is advanced, there is not any old building, which would give tourist more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government had a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry Pier, there were not many people objecting to the proposal. However, many people oppose destroying the Star Ferry Pier at present. I hope the next rebuilding that they should make objection before the consultation finish. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if there were not many people visiting them.

Your basic grammar is poor, though this version is a little better.

You can keep your errors to a minimum by paying attention to your singulars/plurals (tourists, buildings, a HK person, etc.) subject/verb agreements (I see, she sees), and articles (a boy, the cities, the buildings). The rest will improve in time.

I highlighted more things for you to fix.
CoSmO_hk

In most countries, it is essential that the government carries out policy of rebuilding the cities in order to progress in economy. This may induce that many old buildings need to be destroyed. Hence, many people hope to preserve old buildings.

First of all, it is needless to say that is very small and cosmopolitan city. Therefore it has to destroy some old buildings so that the government can construct more facilities such as big squares or skyscrapers. These activities can create more attraction and attract tourists to visit and shop, which will increase the total revenue and extend the job market. Moreover, lack of housing is one of serious problems in .Constructing big buildings can let more people live in (live in where?). Besides, tourists visit to (no "to") in order to see (article) cosmopolitan city instead of (article) antiquated city.

Although rebuilding a city is essential, it does not have to destroy all ancient buildings. They should preserve some ancient buildings because many people grow up with them. Thus, many people have a strong feeling with them. In addition, if they destroy all these constructions, people may not be able to learn about history. If you have children, you could not bring them to visit and show the old buildings where you had often visited before. Furthermore, some old buildings can make tourist (only one?) feel special because they think that is advanced. (Start a new sentence here) __ ____ ____ __ old building,______more surprise.

In my view, I think the Star Ferry need (agreement) to be preserved, but it is a pity that when the government had a consultation about rebuilding the Star Ferry Pier, there were not many people objecting to the proposal. However, many people oppose destroying the Star Ferry Pier at present. I hope the next rebuilding that they should make objection (rewrite sentence) before the consultation finish. Nevertheless, I do not think all old building need to be preserved if there were (tense) not many people visiting them.

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English III P.6

Henry Ford

Henry Ford’s greatest contributions helped move foreword. “I wonder if we can do it, I wonder” (Tilton 47) Ford accomplished his goals and felt like he did a successful job. “I will build a Motor Car for the great multitude, Henry Ford stated. It will be a construction of the best…a good salary will be unable to own one.” (Gordon 30) Ford made life easier for many people. Henry Ford’s greatest contribution to American Society is the dedication to creating the best possible automobile this country has ever seen.

Ford was born in a small town. Ford hated his job that he was born into, which was farming. Henry ford was born on a farm near Dearborn, Michigan on July 30, 1863 (Tilton 8) Ford didn’t want to grow up and be working on the farm like his dad did. He was put in charge of the horses, an important job on a farm where horses did all the heavy work. He mostly enjoyed maintaining his tools in his father’s blacksmith shop. (Tilton 12) Marinating his tools was much more important to him then feeding the horses.

Henry Ford helped the American people turn their daily lives to lives will never forget. The President during Henry Ford’s famous life was Abraham Lincoln. “Sixteenth president of the and president during the civil war” () Henry Ford’s life changed suddenly when the went to WWI.

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The entry into WWI quickly began to affect Henry Ford (Tilton 61)

Changes during these times caused Ford’s pocket a fortune.

Ford had a particular subject that he favored more than any other subject. Ford developed hands on coordination that made education easier for him in the future. Progress made in school: reading, spelling, very talented in math and science, like to explore mechanics (Tilton 14)

Ford packed up his belongings and decided to leave the farm. Henry wanted to be involved with machines and at an early age he headed off for ’s Satanic Mills. He was gifted, life looked good for him but his father persuaded him to come back to the farm. (Ludvigsen 96) Unfortunately, Fords journey had to come to a stop.

Ford developed a career love for mechanics and wanted to pursue it. Fords relationship with his father was not very strong. The first thing I remember in my life is my father taking my brother to a bird’s nest. William Ford figured prominently in Henry’s dreams and memories and gave him profound love and nature would last threw his life. (Collier 19) Ford had helpers that were mechanically equal to him but a little seasoned. Alexander Malcolmson was the coal dealer and business manager, also chief backer. Thomas Edison was “to be aged and not have achieved real success, and to be told ahead forge” (Banham 34) Ford was scared of ending up being like his father.

was changing; Ford was inventing more and more masterpieces. Ford invented the quad, which was a huge success. “Finally in the small hours

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of , it (the quadric) was complete.” –Detroit News-Tribune (Tilton 29) Instead of making the automobile a luxurious car, he decided to go for the speedy car. “The newest and most perfect of forces…rushing along at the rate of 25 miles an hour.”- Detroit News- Tribune (Tilton 30) Ford developed a new name for his expertise, which was a “completed automobile”

’s economy fit in with Henry Ford’s prices of his automobiles. Ford’s intelligence made him successful and famous. In October 1908, Fords unveiled his masterpiece. A new design combine simplicity, sturdiness and reliability, all for 825$(McDonough F4) Ford’s masterpieces were known for there great sustainability. Built the best car ever, still able to maintain the scales that he is accounted for. (McDonough F4) Ford’s developing of new ideas made him an American hero.

Henry Ford made an intelligent country. Ford was an intelligent man with an open mind. “Henry Ford was an inventor and a pioneer of American capitalism” (Tilton 11) Ford’s advice helped people build there confidence and were great motivators. For Henry Ford these were days of great fulfillment and he would spend his time devising ways of improving the car, getting down on the shop floor giving encouragement and advice. (Ludvigsen 99) Advice and encouragement were always good, but are even better from a guy who knows.

Ford’s contributions to helped people move along and be more successful. Ford had a blue thumb for mechanics. Henry ford was all of the following: a mechanical genius, ignorant narrow naïve, and anti-semiotic.

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(Foner 1) Ford was very wealthy and had the best of the best things out there. “That Ford will be found to have lavished more money and experimenting in television than any other sponsor.” (McDonough F4) Ford is a happy successful mechanical genus who can buy anything he wants.

Henry Ford’s greatest contribution to American society is the dedication to creating the best possible automobile this country has ever seen. Ford was born on a farm near . Ford’s life impacted many people. When he took machinery apart and put it back together. Ford changed the style of transportation for Americans. Ford opened up with ideas for new technology that made him a famous celebrity.