here I sent a letter of motivation, please somebody check it, i will thank you a lot

Dear Academic Committee on Admissions Members,

During five years I studied Environmental Sciences and Ecodevelopment at XXX. The emphasis of my studies was on understanding the interactions between people and environment and finding alternatives to conserve the natural resources.

For me, studying at XXX will be an exciting and challenging experience, I am particularly attracted to this programme because my country has a very high biodiversity, actually it presents an increasingly loss due the human activities; I am sure that with this master I will be able to contribute with the local and global efforts in solving this matter.

As part of my studies, I have been involved in various projects and activities about conservation, these allowed me to apply the theoretical skills in a real field work, now I feel that I have relevant skills and experiences to carry out this MSc. programme.

To further my career aspirations of improving the conservation efforts of my country, I want to obtain a Master's Degree in XXX. This knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that natural resources management must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to fit conservation and development.

Yours sincerely,

My name
Horatesh
here I sent a letter of motivation, please somebody check it, i will thank you a lot

Dear Academic Committee on Admissions Members,

During five years I studied Environmental Sciences and Ecodevelopment at XXX. The emphasis of my studies was on understanding the interactions between people and environment and finding alternatives to conserve the natural resources.

For me, studying at XXX will be an exciting and challenging experience, I am particularly attracted to this programme because my country has a very high biodiversity, actually it presents an increasingly loss due the human activities; I am sure that with this master I will be able to contribute with the local and global efforts in solving this matter.

As part of my studies, I have been involved in various projects and activities about conservation, these allowed me to apply the theoretical skills in a real field work, now I feel that I have relevant skills and experiences to carry out this MSc. programme.

To further my career aspirations of improving the conservation efforts of my country, I want to obtain a Master's Degree in XXX. This knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that natural resources management must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to fit conservation and development.

Yours sincerely,

My name

That's a very good letter. I've made some suggestions. Other people may have others. Emotion: smile My main suggestion is to consider using shorter sentences in some places.

I studied Environmental Sciences and Ecodevelopment at ***for five years. The emphasis of my studies was on understanding the interactions between people and environment, and finding alternatives to conserve natural resources.

For me, studying at *** will be an exciting and challenging experience. I am particularly attracted to this programme because my country has very high biodiversity. Actually, it faces an increasing threat of environmental damage due to human activities. I am sure that with this master I will be able to contribute to local and global efforts in solving this problem.

As part of my studies, I have been involved in various projects and activities involving conservation. These allowed me to apply my theoretical skills in _ (I took out "a") real field work. Now I feel that I have relevant skills and experiences to carry out (I’d say "complete") this MSc. programme.

To further my career aspirations of improving the conservation efforts of my country, I want to obtain a Master's Degree in ***. This knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that natural resources management must have a solid (I’d add "practical" after "solid" ) understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, in order to balance (I'd omit "of how to fit") conservation and development.

Yours sincerely,

My name
hello,

thank you very much for your suggestions, I have considered them Emotion: stick out tongue, I just have added something at the begining, I think it fit better with the letter requirements in my brochure of the university, anyway, I am sending it again; could you check it please?; thank you very much again

Horace

Dear Academic Committee on Admissions Members,

I studied Environmental Sciences and Ecodevelopment at the XXX for five years. My studies were focused on natural resources management, biodiversity conservation and people participation; this provoked my strong interest in applying for the XXX MSc. Programme. (I added this)

For me, studying at XXX will be an exciting and challenging experience. I am particularly attracted to this programme because my country has very high biodiversity. Actually, it faces an increasing threat of environmental damage due to human activities. I am sure that with this master I will be able to contribute to local and global efforts in solving this problem.

As part of my studies, I have been involved in various projects and activities involving conservation. These allowed me to apply my theoretical skills in real field work. Now I feel that I have relevant skills and experiences to complete this MSc. programme.

To further my career aspirations of improving the conservation efforts of my country, I want to obtain a Master's Degree in XXX. This knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that natural resources management must have a practical understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, in order to balance conservation and development.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response. (I also added this)

Yours sincerely,

Horace X-X