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Please check my writing. Is there anything you would change?

Sgt. Owen tackles the Chinese soldier to the floor, knocking the rifle out of his hands. The Chinese soldier reaches for a knife strapped to his thigh. Owen sees this and pins his arm against the wall with his foot while grabbing him around the neck with his arm. The Chinese soldier fights to get free, but Owen doesn't let go. After a while, Owen slowly loosens his grip and the Chinese soldiers' head flops to the side. Owen lays the Chinese soldiers' lifeless body gently on the floor and climbs to his feet.

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After the first use of the word 'Chinese', don't use it again.

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Rover_KE

After the first use of the word 'Chinese', don't use it again.

OK. But other than that everything's OK?

Change soldiers' to soldier's twice.