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Hi recently I have decided to write short essay with words that I learn everyday.
Please read my writing and bold my mistake.I don't want an elaborate answer.

It was eight o'clock and I was in my bed.Thinking about my decision .a decision that I had made before really thinking about its consequences.Yesterday I volunteered to help my father to change carpets of corridor and get rid of the clutter of boxes that have been backlogged in the garage.but now I was to exhausted and had lost my ambition to do it.I needed a strenuous force to throw me out of bed and impede me from breaking my promise.So I thought about money that need for the party which i have to ask to my father for it and so immediately i jumped out of bed and said to myself "I am man of my word".I went to bathroom to wash my face and then stepped down to the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me.she was looking at me in an esoteric way.she was against dads plan.she was saying that changing carpet is lavish.

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I have underlined some mistakes. Many of these are grammatical or formatting errors; one or two are cases where a more suitable word could be found.

It was eight o'clock and I was in my bed.Thinking about my decision .a decision that I had made before really thinking about [just to avoid repetition] its consequences.Yesterday I volunteered to help my father to change carpets of corridor and get rid of the clutter of boxes that have been backlogged in the garage.but now I was to exhausted and had lost my ambition to do it.I needed a strenuous force to throw me out of bed and impede me from breaking my promise.So I thought about money that need for the party which i have to ask to my father for it and so immediately i jumped out of bed and said to myself "I am man of my word".I went to bathroom to wash my face and then stepped down to the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me.she was looking at me in an esoteric way.she was against dads plan.she was saying that changing carpet is lavish.
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Last night I was too tired and sleepy so i couldn't rewrite my essay.
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It was eight o'clock and I was in my bed. Thinking about my decision. A decision that I had made before really considering (thinking about [just to avoid repetition] ) its consequences. Yesterday I volunteered to help my father to replace corridor's carpet (change carpets of corridor) and get rid of the clutter of boxes that have been backlogged (Why not? i can use a better word?) in the garage. But now I was too exhausted and had lost my ambition to do it. I needed a strenuous force (Why not? i can use a better word?) to throw me out of bed and stop me (impede me) from breaking my promise. So I thought about the money that I need for the party which I have to ask to my father for it and so immediately I jumped out of bed and said to myself "I am man of my word" . I went to the bathroom to wash my face and then stepped down to the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me. She was looking at me in an esoteric (Why not? i can use a better word?) way. She was against Dad's plan. She was saying that replacing carpet is lavish (Why not? i can use a better word? Should i use "Overspending" ?).
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It was eight o'clock and I was in my bed. Thinking about my decision. A decision that I had made before really considering it's consequences. Yesterday I volunteered to help my father to replace corridor's carpet and get rid of the clutter of boxes that have been backlogged in the garage. But now I was too exhausted and had lost my ambition to do it. I needed a strenuous force to throw me out of bed and stop me from breaking my promise. So I thought about the money that I need for the party which I have to ask my father for it and so immediately I jumped out of bed and said to myself "I am man of my word" . I went to the bathroom to wash my face and then stepped down to the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me. She was looking at me in an esoteric way. She was against Dad's plan. She was saying that replacing the carpet is lavish.
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I said it at first.
It was eight o'clock and I was in my bed. Thinking about my decision. A decision that I had made before really considering its consequences. [the preceding sentences have a noticeably staccato feel; this is not wrong if intentional] Yesterday I volunteered [it may be possible to justify "Yesterday I volunteered" on the basis that you are quoting the actual thoughts at the time; however, I think that "The previous day I had volunteered" is safer] to help my father to [my personal preference would be to delete the word "to" here, but it is not wrong] replace the carpet in the corridor and get rid of the clutter of boxes that had piled up [there are several things that you could say here, but I am not familiar with such use of the word "backlog"] in the garage. But now I was too exhausted and had lost my enthusiasm for doing it ["enthusiasm" seems a better word than "ambition"]. I needed a strong motivation to get me out of bed ["strenuous force" sounds to me like a physical force or exertion] and stop me from breaking my promise. So I thought about the money that I needed for the party, which I had to ask my father for, and then immediately I jumped out of bed and said to myself "I am man of my word". I went to the bathroom to wash my face and then stepped down to the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me. She was looking at me in an ??? ["esoteric" is a strange word to use, but I do not exactly understand what you are trying to convey] way. She was against Dad's plan. She was saying that replacing the carpet was extravagant.
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This is great.I didn't expect this much detailed answer.Emotion: smile
My last tiny question Emotion: embarrassed :
Why it would be wrong to use lavish?
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