Topic: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels pf health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that old age emloyees who are more than 55 years old should give chances for next generation in order to keep company move forward. I personally think that is inessential rue for some reasons.

On the one hand, there are two main reasons why senior emloyees play a crucial role in sustainable development of company. Firstly, those have accumulated a huge of experience not only in their work but also in their lifetime that is a precious resource for their company. As a result, they inevitably become reliable mentors who contribute to inspire and educate some next generations in corporation. Secondly, old age employees have devoted their life for prosperity of company, therefore, they are witnessing the rise and fall of company through different era. In that way, they are becoming a good model for youngster to imitate when it comes to making decision or solving relevant issues.

On the other hand, organization benefits from young generation’s unique advantage. Undeniably, youngster always desire to prove themselves by their passionate as well as their energetic in order to fulfill working commitments. Their self-improvement and learning would also help them to show determination in achieving company targets. In addition, young staffs have many years to dedicate to their work for years to come since elders are likely to be vulnerable to various chronic conditions that negatively affect the level of capacity of them.

In conclusion, by co-operating valuable experiences of the old age staff with creativity of the young employee, organization would be able to run successful company.

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Xuân Lànhaverage weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that old age emloyees (wrong expression) who are more than 55 years old should give chances for next generation in order to keep company move forward. (ungrammatical) I personally think that is inessential rue (wrong word) for some reasons


In your first paragraph you must follow the topic. Write about increasing obesity and more people who are not physically fit.

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This should be " some people believe that in order to give opportunities to new generations, companies should encourage high level emloyees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

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