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A glance at the table provided reveals a number of clear differences among types of items consumed in five European countries, namely Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002 (in percentage).

By and large, the demands for food, drinks, and tobacco are much higher than the others. Also, Turkish's consumption of all groups of items was the most much more than the rest countries.

It is evident that Turkish is on the top in purchasing food, drinks, and cigarettes compared to the other cultures, particularly 32.14%, which is by far highest of countries listed. Likewise, the second most expenditure is Ireland, with 28.91%. In stark contrast, Sweden's proportion is the smallest, only 15.77%, nearly a half of two nations discussed above.

Clothing and footwear were purchased by Italian people most while they were less cared by Swede. In terms of leisure and education, they acquired the least cared from five nations though Turkish paid more attention for recreation and education. Moreover, only a few of Spanish concentrate on their relaxation as well as education.

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A glance at Poor writing for a maths professor! Would you write to a college professor that you only glanced at his information? ) The table provided reveals a number of clear differences among types of items consumed in five European countries, namely Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002 (in percentage).


In paragraph 1, describe the graphic. Do not write about the information itself.

The table lists the percentages of consumer spending in three categories (Food/Drink/Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear and Leisure/Education) in five countries in the year 2002. The countries are Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey.


By and large, The demands (expenditure ) for food, drinks, and tobacco are much higher than the others. (You did not tell the reader what the "others" are. This is confusing.) Also, Turkish's consumption of all groups (wrong expression It is not about how much people consumed, but how much of their total spending they had on these categories.) of items was the most much more than the rest countries.

It is evident that (The words "evident, obvious, notable, and clear" are opinion words. Do not write opinions in Task 1. Only write facts and observations about the data. ) Turkish (Turkish is an adjective. There is Turkish coffee, Turkish clothing, and Turkish customs.) is on the top in purchasing

The Turkish households / people spend more, in percentage terms, on food, drinks, and cigarettes (The category covers Tobacco products, which come in various forms: chewing tobacco, cigars, cigarettes and dried, shredded leaves. Be precise in Task 1. Do not use words that are incorrect. ) compared to the other cultures, (wrong word. A culture is not a nation. A nation can have many different cultures.) particularly 32.14%, which is by far highest of the countries listed. Likewise, the second most (wrong word) expenditure is Ireland, with 28.91%. In stark (Not a mathematical term) contrast, Sweden's proportion is the smallest, only 15.77%, nearly a half of the two nations discussed above.

Clothing and footwear were purchased by Italian people most (wrong expression.) while they were less cared (opinion) by Swedes. In terms of leisure and education, they acquired the least cared from five nations though Turkish paid more attention for recreation and education. Moreover, only a few of Spanish concentrate on their relaxation (incorrect) as well as education.


Model essay:

The table shows the percentage of consumer spending in three sectors (food/drink/tobacco, clothing/footwear and leisure/education) for five different countries (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey) in the year 2002.

Overall, spending was consistently highest in the category "food, drink and tobacco" and lowest for "leisure and education." Turkish people spent a greater percentage of their total spending on these three categories compared to the other four countries, 42%, while Swedes spent the least, 24%. The average spent on the Clothing/Footwear category, 6.8%, was more than twice that of Leisure and Education, 2.9%. but about one-third that of Food, Drink and Tobacco, 22%.

While Turkish people spent the most for food, drink and tobacco, 32.14%, the Irish came in a close second at 28.91%.
The percentages for Italy, Spain, and Sweden were 16.36%, 18.8%, and 15.77% respectively. Spending on the other two sectors was a small fraction of the total. Leisure/education was consistently under 5%, with Turkey having the highest value at 4.35%. And that was slightly lower than clothing and footwear, which ranged from 5.40 to 6.63% in all countries with the exception of Italy, an outlier at 9%.

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Nhật Tiến PhanA glance at the table

Don't just glance at a figure in Task 1. You have to look at it carefully.

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Can you show me different ways to say country, nation, and item (or their synonyms), please?

Nhật Tiến PhanCan you show me different ways to say country, nation, and item (or their synonyms), please?

Why do you want synonyms for country or nation? Use the name of the country: Turkey, Thailand, China, or The Netherlands.

In Task 1 is is generally a bad idea to use synonyms because in Math and Science contexts, words have very specific and precise definitions. Synonyms often have a different shade of meaning than the original word that the author used.

That's why your use of the word "cigarettes" is incorrect - it is a subcategory of "Tobacco."

The two IELTS tasks have very different purposes. Task 1 shows your ability to observe and precisely and objectively describe a figure. Mathematical terms are the vocabulary that is needed.

Task 2 shows your ability to express an opinion in many different ways. Synonyms are useful for doing this.

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