The chart below presents the results of a survey about percentages of residents who bought fresh coffee, bought instant coffee or went to a café or tea in last 4 week of five cities of Australia.

Overall, All five Australian countries have high percentages of residents going to a café for coffee or tea compared to percentages of residents buying fresh coffee. The percentages of residents buying instant coffee are varied on each countries, but there are not much differences of percentages between the cities.

The first group is about residents who bought fresh coffee in last four weeks. The percentages of residents buying coffee of Sydney and Melbourne are nearly the same, at 44% and 43% respectively. Similarly, The percentages of residents buying coffee of Brisbane and Adelaide are also the same but with lower figures, around 34%. Hobart has the average percentage among five cities, at 37%.

The second group is about residents who bought instant coffee in last four weeks. Sydney, Melbourne and Adelaide have the percentages of residents buying instant coffee ranging from 42% to 50%. It is clear that the highest percentage of residents buying instant coffee among all cities is Hobart with 59 %. The second higher one is Brisbane with 55%.

The final group is about residents who went to café for coffee or tea in last four weeks. Top three out of five countries having highest percentage of residents going to café in order are Melbourne , at 68 %, Hobart , at 65 %,and Sydney, at 61 %. Brisbane with 51 % and Adelaide with 49 % are shown on the chart.

In conclusion, the percentages of city residents buying fresh coffee and instant coffee and going to a café in last 4 weeks is varied on each Australian cities.

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Topic: The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below presents the results of a survey about percentages of residents who bought fresh coffee, bought instant coffee or went to a café or tea in last 4 week of five cities of Australia.

Overall, All five Australian countries have high percentages of residents going to a café for coffee or tea compared to percentages of residents buying fresh coffee. The percentages of residents buying instant coffee are varied on each countries, but there are not much differences of percentages between the cities.

The first group is about residents who bought fresh coffee in last four weeks. The percentages of residents buying coffee of Sydney and Melbourne are nearly the same, at 44% and 43% respectively. Similarly, The percentages of residents buying coffee of Brisbane and Adelaide are also the same but with lower figures, around 34%. Hobart has the average percentage among five cities, at 37%.

The second group is about residents who bought instant coffee in last four weeks. Sydney, Melbourne and Adelaide have the percentages of residents buying instant coffee ranging from 42% to 50%. It is clear that the highest percentage of residents buying instant coffee among all cities is Hobart with 59 %. The second higher one is Brisbane with 55%.

The final group is about residents who went to café for coffee or tea in last four weeks. Top three out of five countries having highest percentage of residents going to café in order are Melbourne , at 68 %, Hobart , at 65 %,and Sydney, at 61 %. Brisbane with 51 % and Adelaide with 49 % are shown on the chart.

In conclusion, the percentages of city residents buying fresh coffee and instant coffee and going to a café in last 4 weeks is varied on each Australian cities.

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LE HANH 2383In conclusion, the percentages of city residents buying fresh coffee and instant coffee and going to a café in last 4 weeks is varied on each Australian cities.

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LE HANH 2383The chart below presents the results of a survey about percentages of residents who bought fresh coffee, bought instant coffee or went to a café or tea in last 4 week of five cities of Australia.

Do not use "given", "provided" "above" or "below.

Instead give the exact name of the type of figure.

"Week of five cities" makes no sense.

The survey was not about percentages.

"last 4 week" is not a good expression.

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LE HANH 2383Overall, All five

Capitalization error. "All" is not a proper noun.

LE HANH 2383five Australian countries

Australia is one country. There are not five of them in the world.

LE HANH 2383The percentages of residents buying instant coffee are varied on each countries, but there are not much differences of percentages between the cities.

That makes no sense. There are too many mistakes, and do not write things like "the values are different" because most of the time, for any subject, they are not identical.

LE HANH 2383The percentages of residents buying coffee of Sydney and Melbourne

"Of" means the the coffee was grown in these places.

LE HANH 2383lower figures,

Do not use "figures" Read my advice.

Use "values."

Dear AlpheccaStars,

Thanks so much for your correction on my essay.

I already read your link of instructions for writing task 1. It is so useful.


1) I would like to ask you that I should use Simple past for this essay or not because the values on the chart show the percentages of residents using coffee IN LAST 4 WEEKS.

For example:

On the contrary, Sydney HAVE the highest values with 44%.

OR

On the contrary, Sydney HAD the highest values with 44%.


2) After reading your instructions and your advice, I re-wrote my essay as below. Could you help me check it again?



Here is the essay.



The bar chart presents the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities in last four weeks, which are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. The values are shown by percentages of city residents.

In general, in last four weeks, the percentages of city residents going to a café for coffee or tea in all of the five cities have the highest values, and the percentages of city residents who bought fresh coffee have the lowest values .

In last four weeks, Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart are the top three cities with high values of people who went to a café for coffee or tea with the percentages of residents, at 61%, at 67% and at 65 % respectively. The percentages of residents who bought instant coffee are Sydney with 41%, Melbourne with 46% and Adelaide with 49% in last four weeks. This shows that there are only slightly different between the values of these cities, but they are lower than the group of Brisbane with 53% and Hobart 54 %. Brisbane and Adelaide have the lowest percentage of city residents who bought fresh coffee in last four weeks, at 34%. On the contrary, Sydney have the highest values with 44%.

LE HANH 23831) I would like to ask you that I should use Simple past for this essay or not because the values on the chart show the percentages of residents using coffee IN LAST 4 WEEKS.

There are considerations of using tenses when describing a plot, table or chart.

1. If all the data is past tense, it is more natural to use past tense. However some writers describe the chart as they are seeing it, in present tense. Either way can be ok, but I prefer to use past tense for data values measured in the past. It is much clearer, and the writing will be more natural. The most important principle is to be consistent. Do not mix the tenses.

2. If some of the data is from the past, but there is a forecast into the future, then use past tense for the old data, and future tense for the projected data.

You can use present tense: "The population is forecast to rise from the present time through 2050."

And future tense: "According to the projections, the world population will be 8 billion in 2050."

Mixing tenses is necessary for past, present and future graphs or charts.


In this case, the survey is in the past, and the data is in the past. Use past tense.

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