The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares four different secondary institution categories in terms of types of schools in these years: 2000, 2005 and 2009.

Overall, all schools shown experienced a downward trend with the exception of the community schools. Another key feature is that voluntary- controlled schools were the most popular school type in 2000 and 2005, meanwhile, the community schools registered the highest attendance in 2009.

In 2000, the percentage of pupils attending voluntary-controlled schools was 52%, more than double that of grammar schools. The proportion of students who went to specialist schools constituted 12% which was the same go for community schools. 5 years later, although the figure for voluntary- controlled schools declined to 38%, it still holds the highest position in 2005.

In 2009, community school whose figure top the table at 58%. 20% of the number of students surveyed entering voluntary-controlled schools. In addition, the percentage of pupils in specialist schools and community schools took up a small fraction of the total with 10% and 12% respectively.

The table compares four different secondary institution categories(Incorrect. What data is in the table? It is not categories. ) in terms of types of schools in these years: 2000, 2005 and 2009. (What types - categories - of schools are shown?)


Model paragraph #1

The table lists the percentages of students by the type of secondary school they attended in three different years, 2000, 2005 and 2009. There are four types of schools: voluntary-controlled schools, grammar schools, specialist schools and community schools.


Overall, all schools shown experienced(People experience things. Only living beings have experiences. Schools are not alive. Avoid these words in Task 1 essays: see, witness and experience. They are very good for Task 2 where literary devices such as anthropomorphism are wonderful. They are not good for math / science contexts.) a downward trend with the exception of the community schools. Another key feature is that voluntary- controlled schools were the most popular school type in 2000 and 2005, meanwhile, the community schools registered the highest attendance in 2009.


Model paragraph #2 "Overview"

The entire student population is covered by these four types of schools; the percentages add up to 100% in each year. Three of the types of schools lost their share of students from 2000 to 2009, especially voluntary-controlled schools, whose proportion was cut by more than half. The only type of school that increased its share was community schools, which went up nearly fivefold.



In 2000, the percentage of pupils attending voluntary-controlled schools was 52%, more than double that of grammar schools, which were in second place. The proportion of students who went to specialist schools constitutedwas 12% which was the same go(??) for community schools. 5(Never begin a sentence with a digit. ) years later, although the figure(wrong word.) for voluntary- controlled schools declined to 38%, it still holds (held - past tense) the highest position in 2005.

In 2009, community school (wrong form.) whose figure(wrong word.) top(wrong word.) the table at 58%. 20% of the number of students surveyed(wrong word. You don't know it was a survey. ) entering voluntary-controlled schools. In addition, the percentage of pupils in specialist schools and community schools took up a small fraction of the total with 10% and 12% respectively.

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In 2000, the percentage of pupils attending voluntary-controlled schools was 52%, more than double that of grammar schools, which were in second place. The proportion of students who went to specialist schools was 12% which was the same went for community schools. Five years later, although the figures for voluntary- controlled schools declined to 38%, it still held the highest position in 2005.

In 2009, those attending community school whose figures topped the table at 58%. 20% of the students observed entering voluntary-controlled schools. In addition, the percentage of pupils in specialist schools and community schools took up a small fraction of the total with 10% and 12% respectively.

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In 2000, the percentage of pupils attending voluntary-controlled schools was 52%, more than double that of grammar schools, which were in second place. The proportion of students who went to specialist schools was 12% which was the same as went for community schools. Five years later, although the percentage figures for voluntary- controlled schools had declined to 38%, it still held the highest position in 2005. (You already wrote "five years later". It is incorrect to have a second adverb of time.)

In 2009, the percentage of those attending community school, 58%, was higher than that of all the other schools. In second place, at 20%, were the whose figures topped the table at 58%. 20% of the students observed entering voluntary-controlled schools. In addition, the percentages of pupils in specialist schools and community schools took up a small fraction of the total with 10% and 12% respectively.

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