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The chart shows the difficulties which people have to deal with when they go to live abroad and how long it takes for them to get used to these difficulties in each age group.
The greatest problem for 18-34-year olds is making friends, about 46 percent of the people in this age group experience this problem. However, only 36 percent of people aged 35-54 find it hard to form friendships, while even 23 percent of people over 55-year olds have this problem.
Fifty-four percent of people over 55 find learning to speak the local language is the most problematic. In comparison, the percentage is much lower in the youngest age group (about 29 percent).
In contrast to their language learning difficulties, only 22 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble finding somewhere to live. However, this is the second significant problem for two age groups with 39 to 40 percent of people in each group find it hard to get accommodation.
In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of each age group for these problems is different. While the oldest age group has trouble in learning the local language, two younger age groups have difficulties in making the acquaintance of strangers.

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The chart (What kind of chart?) shows the difficulties (What kinds? how many?) which people have to deal with when they go to live abroad and how long it takes for them to get used to these difficulties (I cannot find any time spans on the chart. Is there a second chart?) in each age group. (How many? What are they?)
The greatest problem for 18-34-year olds is making friends, (comma splice error, run-on sentence) about 46 percent of the people in this age group experience this problem. However, only 36 percent of people aged 35-54 find it hard to form friendships, while even 23 percent of people over 55-year olds have this problem.
Fifty-four percent of people over 55 find learning to speak the local language is the most problematic. In comparison, the percentage is much lower in the youngest age group (about 29 percent).
In contrast to their language learning difficulties, only 22 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble finding somewhere to live. However, this is the second significant problem for two age groups with 39 to 40 percent of people in each group find it hard to get accommodation.
In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of each age group for these problems is different. While the oldest age group has trouble in learning the local language, two younger age groups have difficulties in making the acquaintance of strangers.

(Put your overview paragraph after the opening paragraph.It is much more logical to first describe your most important observations and follow that with details.)

You did not write anything about how long people in these age groups get over the problems. You will lose points for omitting this information.

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I have write it again. Please tell me if i make any other mistakes. Thank you so much.

The bar chart shows the difficulties people have when they go to live abroad and how the problems vary people of three age groups. There are three problems which are to make friends, find somewhere to live and learn the local language.
The greatest problem for people aged 18 to 34 is making friends. About 46 percent of the people in this age group experience this problem. However, only 36 percent of people aged 35-54 find it hard to form friendships, while even 23 percent of people over 55 have this problem.
Fifty-four percent of people over 55 find learning to speak the local language is the most problematic. In comparison, the percentage is much lower in the youngest age groups ( 29 percent experienced by people aged 18 to 43 and 35 percent experienced by people aged 35 to 54 ).
In contrast to their language learning difficulties, only 22 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble finding somewhere to live. However, this is the second significant problem for two age groups with 39 to 40 percent of people in each group find it hard to get accommodation.
In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of older people who find language learning difficult is much higher than any others.

walk ladder 314I have write it again. Please tell me if i make any other mistakes. Thank you so much.

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I have written it again. Please tell me if I have made any other mistakes. Thank you so much.

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The bar chart shows three typical difficulties people have when they go to live abroad and to what extent how the problems vary by age group. people of three age groups. Specifically, the chart plots the percentage in each age group that report experiencing the problem. There are three problems: which are to make friends, find somewhere to live and learn the local language. The age groups are young (18-34), middle-aged (35-54) and older (over 55) people.

(Put the overall, or most important features next.)

In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of older people who find language learning difficult is much higher than any others.


The greatest problem for middle-aged people people aged 18 to 34 is making friends. About 46 percent of the people in this age group experience this problem. However, only 36 percent of people aged 35-54 find it hard to form friendships, while even 23 percent of people over 55 a little less than a quarter of older people have this problem.
Fifty-four percent of people over 55 find learning to speak the local language is the most problematic. In comparison, the percentage is much lower in the youngest age groups ( 29 percent experienced by people aged 18 to 43 for the middle-aged group and 35 percent for the older adults. experienced by people aged 35 to 54 ).
In contrast to their language learning difficulties, only 22 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble finding somewhere to live. However, this is the second significant problem (about 40%) for the people in the other two age groups with 39 to 40 percent of people in each group find it hard to get accommodation.
In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of older people who find language learning difficult is much higher than any others.

Can I write the overview like this? I extremely apologize for bothering you so much.

"Overall, the same problems are all experienced by three age groups.The highest percentage is reached by the learning-a-local-language problem in the oldest age group while the percentage of finding somewhere to live in this one is much lower than any others."

walk ladder 314"Overall, the same problems are all experienced by three age groups.

That does not give the reader any "main feature" information. It is not saying much of anything.

walk ladder 314The highest percentage is reached by the learning-a-local-language problem in the oldest age group while the percentage of finding somewhere to live in this one is much lower than any others."

That is extremely awkward. Do not use long hyphenated made-up modifiers.

"reach" is not good..


Examples:

1. Learning the local language presents a greater challenge for older people. Almost twice as many in the oldest group experience this problem as in the youngest group, with the middle-aged group in between the extremes.

2. In contrast, the opposite is true for making friends. More than twice as many young people experience this problem as compared to the oldest group.

3. In the middle-age group, all three difficulties are nearly equally problematic. Over a third, (between 35 and 40 percent) experience one or more of them.

4. The most significant problem among all age groups is for the seniors having to learn the language. More than half of them, about 55%, report this being an issue. In second place is the youngest people trying to make friends, with a little less than half. For all other combinations of age and difficulty, the number reporting the problem is four in ten or less.

5. The least of these problems, seen in the oldest age group, is a virtual tie between making friends and locating accommodation. Only one in five report these as problems.

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Can I write the introduction for that bar chart like this?

" The bar chart illustrates three typical problems people have (Can I use the word "face") when they settle in (Can I use "when settling in") a new country and the percentage of each problem varies among three age groups (the youngest, the middle and the oldest age group). Three problems mentioned are making friends, finding somewhere to live and learning the local language."

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