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Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and to not want to visit a doctor.

Is this a positive or negative development?

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In this technological era, we have convenience to access into huge source of information on Internet, social media or other digital platforms. Some people might thing that there is no need to go to hospital or meeting with doctor about their health problem, they could find it on their computer or their smartphone instead. However, I strongly believe that this could take more disadvantageous than advantageous. And this essay will briefly discuss my opinion.

On the one hand, our trust on the advice from internet or irrelated person could deliberately make our circumstance worse. One of the main principle disadvantage is that there is no criticism or scientific testing on what is published on Internet and it is very dangerous for us to believe those kinds of information. Moreover, only by having an accurate assumption related our health could we find an appropriate treatment. For example, if we decide to ask Google instead of doctor when we feel cold and cough regularly, it will display variety types of sickness such as flu, common cold or even a symptom of cancer. As a result, this unreliable answer will take both mentality and physical status of patient down.

Another disadvantage is that we cannot buy the appropriate medicine to treat us well since the initial forecast may be wrong and it may lead us into another bad health problem. However, it has not all been negative and our innovation in accessible information could be leverage effectively in this field. It is obvious that we could mitigate both time and money when we do not directly come to visit a doctor and choose to contact them on their website or social media fanpage. In addition, Covid pandemic let us decide whether we enter to crowd place like hospital or clinic then stay at home then treat based on the authorized advice from experts.

In conclusion, there are clearly positive and negative results to taking advice about our health instead of going to healthcare place. Overall , the disadvantageous may outweigh the advantage since it is quite difficult to have correct assumption if people continue to read and follow unreliable advice.

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danh197Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and to not want to visit a doctor.

You did not copy the instructions accurately. It does not make sense. I think it is one of these:

Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems from the internet and do not want to visit a doctor.
Some people use the Internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples from your experience.
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In this technological era, (That is not a good phrase.) With computers and the Internet, we have convenient access to an immense convenience to access into huge source of information on websites on the Internet, social media or other digital platforms. Some people might thing (wrong word) that there is no need to go to hospital or meeting (wrong verb form) with their doctor about their health problem, (comma splice error) they could find it on by doing searches from their computer or their smartphone instead. However, I strongly believe that this could take (wrong word) more disadvantageous than advantageous. And this essay will briefly discuss my opinion.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know the essay will have your opinion because that is the task. Do not tell them what they know. Delete the last sentence.

The previous sentence is also a problem. This task is NOT an advantages/ disadvantages essay. It you write this type of essay, you will lose points. The essay prompt is: Is this a positive or negative development?

You must answer this question in the first paragraph. The question is A (positive) or B (negative). You must chose one and give arguments to support your opinion. If you choose both, you are not doing this task correctly.


On the one hand, our trust in on the advice from internet or irrelated person could deliberately make our circumstance worse. One of the main principle disadvantage is that there is no criticism or scientific testing on what is published on Internet and it is very dangerous for us to believe those kinds that kind of information. Moreover, only by having an accurate assumption (wrong word) related to our situation health could we find an appropriate treatment. For example, if we decide to ask Google instead of doctor when we feel cold and cough regularly, it will display variety various types of sickness such as flu, common cold or even a symptom of cancer. As a result, this unreliable answer will take both mentality and physical status of patient down. (That does not make sense. I do not know what you mean.)

Another disadvantage (You are writing the wrong type of essay.) is that we cannot buy the appropriate medicine to treat us well since the initial forecast (wrong word) may be wrong and it may lead us into another bad health problem. However, it has not all been negative and our innovation in accessible information could be leverage effectively in this field. (That does not make sense. I do not know what you mean.) It is obvious that we could mitigate (wrong word) both time and money when we do not directly come to visit a doctor and choose to contact them on their website or social media fanpage. In addition, Covid pandemic let us decide whether we enter to crowd place (That does not make sense..) like hospital or clinic then stay at home then treat based on the authorized advice from professionals. experts.

In conclusion, there are clearly positive and negative results to taking advice about our health instead of going to healthcare place. Overall , the disadvantageous may outweigh the advantage (That was NOT the essay question.) since it is quite difficult to have correct assumption if people continue to read and follow unreliable advice.


Here are the five essay types. This task is type 1. But you answered like it was Type 2. That is not good for your band score, especially "task response.".

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