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I have made up 19 sentences and would like you to correct them. I know that some of these sentences are fairly simple but the reason why I decided to write them is that I wanted to practise new words and expressions I had picked up recently. Thanks in advance!

Here are these sentences:

1. Having known that a friend of mine had already been discharged from hospital two days ago, I went to the shop to buy a bunch of flowers for him. I thought it would make him happy.
2. My friend, a scientist, advised me to investigate the subject I was writing my essay on more thoroughly before taking the exam.
3. After a long discussion we came to a conclusion that the reason why he had failed to perform his obligations was his careless reading of the safety regulations.
4. The buds of many trees get swollen in spring and have a lovely scent.
5. In spite of the fact that his own car, a Toyota, had repeatedly got into a crash he continued saying he was a good driver.
6. A lot of historians believe that Columbus discovered America in 1492 due to being a very experienced navigator.
7. Despite the tree having given a lot of fruit this summer we’ll have to cut it down. What a shame!
8. The war in Iraq is still the topic of argument between many European countries and the USA.
9. Even though Japan were considered to be of much lower class than most other teams that came to the World Championship held in South Korea and Japan they managed to reach the quarter final.
10. The company has ceased bringing it profit because its goods were not in demand.
11. Africa is infested with monkeys. Perhaps, it’s the main reason why people adore them there.
12. This material is indispensable to producing these kinds of goods.
13. Many correspondents thought that Lokomotiv’s chance of coming first this year had melted away long ago but having beaten Torpedo 3:1 Lokomotiv climbed to the top of the table.
14. I was glad to know that at the press conference which had been held on the eve of the match both coaches had discussed the main problems of their teams before the forthcoming match.
15. Working at Microsoft I gained all-round experience in communicating with different kinds of people.
16. I lost a very important disc recently. I put up a notice at school yesterday which says I’m offering a big reward to the one who finds the disc.
17. I lost a very important disc recently. I put up a notice which says I’m offering a big reward to the one who finds the disc at school yesterday.
18. The remoteness of our village from Moscow makes us think of buying a new countryside house closer to the city.
19. Many historians consider that the reason why Russia was backward in its development from other European countries for many centuries is that the Russians have a very peculiar disposition.
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ReDSanchous,

You've got a great idea. To make it an even better idea, YOU should answer you own questions and then we'll help you when you make a mistake.

I am going to move your topic to ESL. You should be getting a notice in your e-mail.

Thank you.

MountainHiker
I've recieved the notice you told me about. What do you mean by "YOU should answer your own questions and..." Do you want me to ask you questions? As far as I understood you want me to ask you about the sentences or some parts of them I'm hesitating about, don't you?
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Hi,
I have made up 19 sentences and would like you to correct them.


You've given 19 sentences that you want corrected. You should try to correct those sentences on your own first. If your answers are incorrect, then we'll give you a hand. But we won't or shouldn't blindly correct answers for people. Often people post their homework for us to complete. That doesn't help anyone.

The best way to learn is to try to answer your own questions. Show us the original question, and then show us your answer. If you are unsure or have answered the question incorrectly, someone will assist you.

But it is very important that you try to answer the questions first.

I hope that makes this situation clearer.

MountainHiker
Well, I think you got me wrong. These sentences were not my homework! I have made them up by myself! Nobody helped me write them. No teacher could have given me the sentence about Lokomotiv coming first this year. S/he would have asked me to translate something more interesting for them. You know it's not interesting for me to transalte stupid sentences about politcs which I'm not very interested in at all now. Of course, they improve your English and expand your vocabulary but if they are of no interest to you they are absolutely useless. I get bored with such work very quickly. Nevertheless, I must point out that if I want to master English one day I'll have to able to translate such sentences. But now I'm more intrested in sports, Intrenet, Geography, etc. than in politics.

If you keep saying that I should correct the sentecnes on my own first I'll do that.
Here are my own corrections:

3. After a long discussion we came to a conclusion that the reason why he had failed to
perform his obligations was his careless reading of the safety regulations.

I think that I probably have to say: his careless reading the safety regulations.

9. Even though Japan were considered to be of much lower class than most other teams that came to the World Championship held in South Korea and Japan they managed to reach the quarter final.

… that came to the World Championship held in… Can I say that those team CAME to the competition in order to take part in it? Do you use the verb “hold” with such competitions as world championships?

12. This material is indispensable to producing these kinds of goods.

Can I use the structure to+ -ing in this sentence? If not, explain to me why I can’t? And I would also like you to take a look at the following sentence:
International cooperation is indispensable to resolving the problem of the drug trade. This one is absolutely correct, for it’s taken from the Macmillan English dictionary (though I think you don’t know this dictionary).

What’s the difference between these two sentences?

15. Working at Microsoft I gained all-round experience in communicating with different kinds of people.

How would you say: an all-round experience or all-round experience?

16. I lost a very important disc recently. I put up a notice at school yesterday which says I’m offering a big reward to the one who finds the disc.
I think that I probably should use the Present Perfect in the first sentence. I read somewhere that if recently means a short time ago you can use the Past Simple. In my sentence I meant that I lost that disc a short time ago. It’s a little bit confusing, I guess.

17. I lost a very important disc recently. I put up a notice which says I’m offering a big reward to the one who finds the disc at school yesterday.

:-S

The same sentence. The only distinction between these two sentences is that I have changed the order of the words in them. Which of these two sentences is correct?

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ReDSanchous,

3. After a long discussion we came to a conclusion that the reason why he had failed to perform his obligations was his careless reading of the safety regulations.


This is long and wordy.

We concluded that he failed to perform his obligations because he didn't read the safety regulations carefully/properly (pick one).

9. Even though Japan were considered to be of much lower class than most other teams that came to the World Championship held in South Korea and Japan they managed to reach the quarter final.

… that came to the World Championship held in… Can I say that those team CAME to the competition in order to take part in it? Do you use the verb “hold” with such competitions as world championships?


Those teams that came-->yes, that is correct
"Held" is correct too.

I would write...

Even though [Japan's TEAM] were considered to be of much lower class than most other teams that came to the World Championship held in South Korea and Japan they managed to reach the quarter final.

Japan is not lower class. It is Japan's team that is lower class.
12. This material is indispensable to producing these kinds of goods.

Can I use the structure to+ -ing in this sentence? If not, explain to me why I can’t? And I would also like you to take a look at the following sentence:
International cooperation is indispensable to resolving the problem of the drug trade. This one is absolutely correct, for it’s taken from the Macmillan English dictionary (though I think you don’t know this dictionary).

What’s the difference between these two sentences?


I think your "to " is okay. I might have used "for" rather than "to". I am not sure why. Perhaps someone else will jump in and provide additional guidance.

Your second sentence looks fine too.

15. Working at Microsoft I gained all-round experience in communicating with different kinds of people.

How would you say: an all-round experience or all-round experience?


I'd probably use a different adjective....From Roget's II...

adjective

1) Covering a wide scope: all-around, all-inclusive, broad, broad-spectrum, comprehensive, expansive, extended, extensive, far-ranging, far-reaching, general, global, inclusive, large, overall, sweeping, wide-ranging, wide-reaching, widespread. See specific/general.

2) Having many aspects, uses, or abilities: all-around, many-sided, multifaceted, protean, various, versatile. See ability/inability, same/different/compare.

17. I lost a very important disc recently. I put up a notice which says I’m offering a big reward to the one who finds the disc at school yesterday.


The above sentence doesn't work. You don't "finds" something yesterday.

I am offering a reward to the one who finds my disc. Okay. The person *** find my disc.

I am offering a reward to the one who FOUND my disc yesterday. Okay. I know someone found it because it wasn't on the computer where I left it. So now I am willing to offer a reward.

I am offering a reward to the one who returns my disc. (I don't care when you found it, just return the darn thing.)

If you find that you post has been overlooked for a day or two, just bump it upward by commenting in a new post "Bump, please respond."

I hope this helps.

MountainHiker
This is long and wordy.


I know that this sentence was fairly long and wordy but the reason why I decided to write such a wordy sentence was that I wanted to practise a few new words and my grammar. That's why I wrote a long and wordy sentence. Nevertheless, if you think that a more compact sentence looks better I'll alter my sentence.
Japan is not lower class. It is Japan's team that is lower class.


Why then do you normally say: Yes, England have done it! They are going to the European Championship in Portugal next summer! OR Italy went down 2:1 to Brazil. Is it better to say: Italy's (national) team went down 2:1 to Brazil's team.

Roget's II
Hm... Unfortunately, I don't know what it is. Can you tell me what it means? I suspect it's some kind of dictionary.
I am offering a reward to the one who finds my disc. Okay. The person *** find my disc.

I am offering a reward to the one who FOUND my disc yesterday. Okay. I know someone found it because it wasn't on the computer where I left it. So now I am willing to offer a reward.

I am offering a reward to the one who returns my disc. (I don't care when you found it, just return the darn thing.)


Thank you for the excellent explanation!

P.S. I didn't feel like creating a new post, so I carried on posting in this thread.
P.S.2 Do you think I should get on writing such sentences with my own corrections?
Hello RdS

19 is an intriguing number to choose.

There are one or two errors in the sentences you haven't discussed with MH. I'll mark in bold the parts that need a 2nd look. Feel free to post any revisions.

I've also asked some additional questions, so you can practise composing sentences:

1. 'Having known that a friend of mine had already been discharged from hospital two days ago, I went to the shop to buy a bunch of flowers for him. I thought it would make him happy.'

4. 'The buds of many trees get swollen in spring and have a lovely scent.' Describe the scent of the buds of 3 different kinds of tree.

6. 'A lot of historians believe that Columbus discovered America in 1492 due to being a very experienced navigator.'

7. 'Despite the tree having given a lot of fruit this summer we’ll have to cut it down. What a shame!' Why did you have to cut down the tree? What kind of tree was it? And what did you do with the fruit?

9. 'Even though Japan were considered to be of much lower class than most other teams that came to the World Championship held in South Korea and Japan they managed to reach the quarter final.' 'Lower class' is used in the wrong context here. Can you use it correctly in a new sentence?

11. 'Africa is infested with monkeys. Perhaps, it’s the main reason why people adore them there.'

18. The remoteness of our village from Moscow makes us think of buying a new countryside house closer to the city.

19. 'Many historians consider that the reason why Russia was backward in its development from other European countries for many centuries is that the Russians have a very peculiar disposition.' Also: what is so peculiar about the Russian disposition?

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