How are you ? Are you busy worked in Brunei ? Yesterday, I saw some your updated photo in your public album. The man who wear a straight line grey T-shirt in your picture no. 044, is your boyfriend ? Our company has a big changed for the personnel matters. May, Jube and Joe will leave soon, Stephen was promoted to General Manger ....., I hope this is a good beginning. How is your business ? Please keep to upload you new photo, and don't forget advise us if one day you will marry. You need to invite all of us to attend your wedding in Brunei, of course included free ticket and meal for us. Finally, I wish you have good business to get more money, always sweet with your boyfriend and always happy. Keep in touch !
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I'm learning English. I want to help you with the best I can, but I think it may still have many mistakes. Hope you like it.
How are you ? Are you busy at work in Brunei ? Yesterday, I saw some your updated photos in your public album. The man who wears a straight line grey T-shirt in your picture no. 044 is your boyfriend ? Our company has a big change for the personnel matters. May, Jube and Joe will leave soon, Stephen was promoted to General Manger ....., I hope this is a good beginning. How is your business ? Please keep uploading your new photos, and don't forget to advise us if one day you will marry. You need to invite all of us to attend your wedding in Brunei, of course that included free ticket and meal for us. Finally, I wish you will have the good business to get more money, always be sweet with your boyfriend and always be happy. Keep in touch !
Have a better day.
I think "busy" is an adj so we don't use worked here. As I think I will write : are you busy in Bruney? It's enough.
What do you think of it?
I've corrected some mistakes. But I'm not sure of the blue words. To quangtn : Hi, you are from VN, aren't you ?
Hey newbie. I have some questions for this passage. (the blue words are ones I am not sure
How are you ? Are you busy working (why don't use "at work" here) in Brunei ? Yesterday, I saw some of your updated photos in your public album. Is the man who wore a grey straight line T-shirt in your picture no. 044 your boyfriend ? Our company has a big change of/on/about the personnel matters. In May (May is probably a name?), Jube and Joe will leave soon, Stephen has been (were?) promoted to General Manger ....., I hope this is a good beginning. How is your business ? Please keep (on) uploading (keep doing smt?) your new photos, and don't forget informing us about when you marry. You need to invite all of us to attend your wedding in Brunei, of course including the free tickets and meals for us. Finally, I wish you would (will ?)have a good business to get more money, be always sweet with your boyfriend and be happy. Keep in touch !
May I have your explanations? Thank you very much.
Yeah, Thanks for your ideas.
They are also ok.
Yeah, Thanks for your ideas.
They are also ok.
But wish you would have a good business to get more money, be always sweet with your boyfriend and be happy. Keep in touch !
In my opinion, You have to use would and be. It likes a conditional tense.
About be, the above sentence like : I wish to happy. Instead of : I wish be happy or I wish happiness.
"I wish you will have..." is a true conditional sentence. I think this is a letter so the writer have a wish for his friend.
The latter is "I wish you will be happy", not "I wish be happy". He write for friend not for himself.
Are you ok? Tell me what do you think?