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I watched last movie in the month of March and name of this movie is "AIRLIFT" this is a real story . I will write this story in many parts so that you can correct my grammar easily.

PART 1

A man of Indian origin named Ranjeet lives in Kuwait. he was big shot in Kuwait.he had a good relations with richest man of Kuwait .he was spending luxurious life in Kuwait. one day around 3:00 pm he was sleeping one of his friend called him and said Iran has attacked upon Kuwait and government of Kuwait has fled away.he replied in a normal way this is not a happen once upon a time.it keeps on happening in Kuwait on regular basis.

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I edited your mistakes and I've also changed some of your sentences by adding some words or something because I think it's better to be said this way:

A man of Indian origin lives in Kuwait. he was a big shot there and had a good relationship with the richest person in kuwait. no wonder he was living a luxurious life. one day, a friend of him called when he was sleeping. the friend said that Iran has attacked Kuwait and the government has fled the country. he replied in a normal way and said it doesn't happen once in a blue moon, actually it keeps happening on a regular basis here.

Thank you so much sir for your wonderful help.

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I am writing a second part of this story .please correct my error's/

PART 2

But when he realised that the situation was getting worst and worst day by day .he will go to London with his family and went Indian embassy but on the way his driver has been killed by Iraqi's army and when he reached embassy did not find any one there. while he was returning from the embassy amid path he has been caught by Iraqi's commander and said that you give me dollar i give you permission to go out of here. he thought i can easily go out of here with my family but what about my company's employees who have been working for me since a long time ago. how can i leave them alone.

your welcome! here is how I corrected your mistakes (you had some dictation mistakes as well):

But when he realized that the situation is getting worse and worse, day by day, he decided to go to London with his family and went to the Indian embassy, but on their way, his driver got killed by Iraqi's army and when he arrived at the embassy, he couldn't find anyone there! while he was returning from the embassy, in the middle of the path, he got caught by an Iraqi commander and said that he would give him the permission to go. only if he gets some dollars. he knew that he can easily get out of there with his family but he thought about his company as well. he thought: what about my employees who have been working for me for a long time. how can I leave them alone?!


I need to tell you some items which could help you:

1) pay more attention to the tense you use .i don't know which tense you've studied till now. but if you wanna tell the story using the past tense, just use the past tense. Don't use present perfect for example when not necessary. for example, you said: he has been caught by an Iraqi commander. while all your sentences were in past form, you suddenly used a present form which doesn't talk about what happened in the past and the result can be seen, nor about an experience! so try to use the correct form of the verbs.

2) you have some problems using the right collocation for words. so I suggest you check collocations for the words you're not sure what to say with, in www.ozdic.com

by the way, Im not a boy Emotion: smile

Mahta, you've offered some good suggestions, but you've also made a few mistakes.

Note that all sentences should start with a capital letter.

A man of Indian origin lives (lived) in Kuwait. he was a big shot there and had a good relationship with the richest person in kuwait. no wonder he was living a luxurious life. one day, a friend of him (his) called when he was sleeping. the friend said that Iran (Iraq) has (had) attacked Kuwait and the government has (had) fled the country. he replied in a normal way and said it doesn't happen (just) once in a blue moon, actually it keeps happening on a regular basis here.

your (You're) welcome! here is how I corrected your mistakes (you had some dictation mistakes as well):

But when he realized that the situation is getting worse and worse, day by day, he decided to go to London with his family and went to the Indian embassy, but on their way, his driver got killed by Iraqi's army (the Iraqi army) and when he arrived at the embassy, he couldn't find anyone there! while he was returning from the embassy, in the middle of the path (journey would fit better here), he got caught by an Iraqi commander and (who) said that he would give him the permission to go. (this should all be one sentence) only if he gets [was paid would fit better here] some dollars. he knew that he can (could) easily get out of there with his family, but he thought about his company as well. he thought: what about my employees who have been working for me for a long time. how can I leave them alone?! (He thought, "what about my employees who have been working for me for a long time? How can I leave them alone [behind would probably fit better here]?")

I need to tell you some items which could help you:

1) pay more attention to the tense you use. i don't know which tense you've studied till now. but if you wanna (want to) tell the story using the past tense, just use the past tense. Don't use present perfect for example when not necessary. for example, you said: he has been caught by an Iraqi commander. while all your sentences were in past form, you suddenly used a present form which doesn't talk about what happened in the past and the result can be seen, nor about an experience, so try to use the correct form of the verbs.

2) you have some problems using the right collocation for words, so I suggest you check collocations for the words you're not sure what to say with, in www.ozdic.com.

by the way, Im (I'm) not a boy.

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Thank you so much Sir.

Sir, Why we can not use "His driver had been killed by the Iraqi army instead of His driver got killed by Iraqi army"

Similarly why we can not use " He had been caught by an Iraqi commander instead of He got caught by an Iraqi commander"

Thank you so much ma'am .

I am writing last part of this story please check my grammatical errors.

PART 3

He decided he would not only get out of there with his family but also with his company's employees.He sat a camp for his employees but in this camp along with his employees all Indian were come.he had had the food arranged for his peoples.and went Iraq and talked a Iraq's government for freedom of Indians. government gave him consolation and said that we would send our ship "TIPU SULTAN" from Kuwait to India. But due to some circumstances Tipu sultan had been stooped by government. One of his friends gave him a contact number of embassy. He called embassy and embassy said that you had to come "Amman". All of Indians would come "Amman" and In the first time in the history this happened India's had lend 476 flights for picking up his peoples.

I was so pleased to hear from you! Thank you for your great awareness. I'm way too careless and don't pay much attention to using a capital letter at the beginning, but I will from now on!

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